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love's victim
New Member

since 2001-05-24

Posts 2
the old city icehouse

0 posted 2001-05-24 05:31 PM

Who could it be that's after me?
What is his name, what is this game?
To threaten just my mortal life
that would be no sacrifice.
But threatening my family
then that would be your demise.

What have I done to deserve this pain?
Where is shelter from the rain?
To cage a man is to drive him down.
I pray they'll get what's coming 'round.

God holds our fate within his hands.
Life and death--it's all a plan.
Protect the children of the righteous man.
when Satan comes--bodies turn to sand.

Poeminister
Senior Member

since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

1 posted 2001-05-24 05:39 PM

Love's Victim-
I like the way your piece flows...very well written.
Welcome to Passions!

Poeminister

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2001-05-24 05:45 PM

I like this much Ray..but of course I would! lol...looking forward to reading more of your work! Welcome to Passions...now go home and write some more poetry! ROFL.....

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

3 posted 2001-05-24 07:49 PM

Welcome to the family! I enjoyed your first poem!! Please check your email!

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2001-05-25 12:30 PM

Welcome to Poetry Land LV..
nice to have you here with us.
I look forward to reading more of your interesting style of writing...
this was a cool first post...
cryptic and dark edged...with chilling imagery
and the title and last line is very cool
well done poet sir

We wish ourselves beautiful,
we cry in the night.
Its not the love you fear ...
its the fall from the height.
~Edwin McCain~

Cerenity
Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 2637
Escondido-California

5 posted 2001-05-25 02:00 PM

Hi Love's Victim,

Powerful message in this piece and yes the last line was a winner, the poem wonderful, welcome to Passions, look forward to more of your work.

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)

Saunni
Senior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 1777
West Virginia

6 posted 2001-05-26 03:45 PM

A great one here! Enjoyed it muchly!

Sauni

Sauni :)
Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak
I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

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