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Mabel A. Dilley
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since 2001-03-17
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Seattle, WA, USA

0 posted 2001-07-01 06:38 PM





There are mountains too beautiful to see



And valleys far too lovely for our eyes.

Yet that is where we often want to be:

Pure and passionate, untamed and free,



Racing through a field beyond our skies
In those mountains too beautiful to see.

We hunger with a cruel intensity
That rips away the smile on our disguise.
Yet that is where we often want to be:

Impaled upon a painful ecstasy
So real that all else seems like whispered lies
In those mountains too beautiful to see.

But we must sing our lonely sanity



And dance among the ashes of our cries.
Yet that is where we often want to be:

Naked in a room that we would flee,



Defenseless in our love, if we are wise.
For those mountains are too beautiful to see,
And those valleys are too lovely far to be.

"I am not now that which I have been."

© Copyright 2001 Mabel A. Dilley - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-07-01 08:50 PM


This is quite a vision. Much enjoyed

"Impaled upon a painful ecstasy
So real that all else seems like whispered lies
In those mountains too beautiful to see.

But we must sing our lonely sanity"

Specially liked that part  

Sandra


Janet Marie
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2 posted 2001-07-01 08:59 PM


We hunger with a cruel intensity
That rips away the smile on our disguise.
Yet that is where we often want to be:

Impaled upon a painful ecstasy
So real that all else seems like whispered lies
In those mountains too beautiful to see.

But we must sing our lonely sanity
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what a very cool poem...
I loved the melodics of this and the imagery and presentation..
but most of all the intensity of the emotions.
I had to look around to see if you were peeking in my mind with those verses I put above...
Excellent write JL.
jm

We're all feeding our lonely like it might go away,
Like the doors of heaven will swing wide open if we just find the right words to say.
~E. McCain

Honeybee
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3 posted 2001-07-01 09:06 PM



Julian~

What an awesome, imaginative write with an equally effective presentation!  

Take care,
Melissa~

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4 posted 2001-07-01 10:33 PM


Just a beautiful package tied in a bow, was that my Canada Day present?  No...well, I am taking it as one, it was breathtaking Mabel!

If I have made you smile today, then I have done my job!    ~* Mysteria *~

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Deep in the heart
5 posted 2001-07-02 11:59 AM


Yes, some things are so beautiful to behold that it almost hurts.  Well done.
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