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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Exposed How long does the essence survive when left exposed to unhindered winds sheltered no longer it’s very skin worn thin by words abrasion near deaf from decibels of rage numb with the suffocation of reason denied Now that the very core is threatened will I stop talking and defend? |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
aw girl this is so very RAW...do not go on the defensive...take a stand baby |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
This piece is extremely powerful. I think it's one I'd like to save in my favorites file. Is that okay? Please e-mail me the title and that it is, if it is. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Oh how painful to read and reread this. To hear each word whole. Powerfully real. (to me). Thanks for sharing. *Peace. |
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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
R.J. This piece is very powerful and emotional. You have to do what is right for you. I know you will make the right decision. ttys, Laura  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
now this is what I call getting to the heart of the matter RJ. . . excellent. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
JLR- Sad, but well expressed. To defend ourselves is an instinct and don't stop talking. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Paula---RAW would exactly describe it. Trying. VAS---Flattered...of course. SpitFire---And you were right. Thank you. Sven---Yes, it was right there...and you would see that. walker---An instinct I am sharpening. Thanks. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
it’s very skin worn thin by words abrasion near deaf from decibels of rage numb with the suffocation of reason denied I agree with the others powerful write, Often when we leave ourselves open we can get hurt and these times are the most painful but don't block yourself off completely. You need to find a place in between the two, unfortunately that is the why it has to be in life. Take care and thanks for sharing. "difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
I like this JLR.. portrays a sense of resignation without making me feel the person has given up.. nice work  There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
i read it an will read it again,its so good |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Interesting concept JLR I really like the finality of the emotions! Good words and work! |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Oh, this is so touching and yes so very powerful! Well done, My Friend, your work is very much enjoyed Sauni Sauni :) |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
yes...you will...there is only so much you can take, and its either defend or give up, but your writing has strenght |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
brian, Jamie, Watersign, Saunni, jellybeans---Thanks all for reading this second time around. A stand was taken...progress being made! Stay tuned. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Thanks, JLR, I've pocketed it into my favorites!! |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
I hope so. Nicely done. PM |
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latin passion Senior Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 576 |
Powerful... I hope one wouldn't have to go to that extreme. I look forward to reading more of your poems.. |
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