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kaile
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0 posted 2001-06-07 12:08 PM


We are little fishes
assigned to flow
a certain direction

Society dictates that
we score distinctions,
secure scholarships,
attend IVY league schools,
take up prestigious professions,
roll in wealth and power

An inclination,
almost compulsion
to travel
the wide
conventional path

I join heartily
and can only imagine
the bliss that
might have been mine
if i had the guts
to choose
the
N
A
R
R
O
W
path

© Copyright 2001 heng kaile - All Rights Reserved
VAS
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1 posted 2001-06-07 12:13 PM


Ooooh, faterider, this must be to respond to the challenge I put up...inclination to travel the wide path.  Well done!!!    So, does that mean you have or are going for an ivy league education?  You know,  that can come into great use on the narrow path as well.  Probably very great use.
Poeminister
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2 posted 2001-06-07 02:26 AM



I enjoyed your thoughts in this.  Well written.

Poeminister

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--Goethe

SEA
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3 posted 2001-06-07 02:34 AM


yes, very well written   very thoughtful  
azblond
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4 posted 2001-06-07 03:17 AM


Insightful......

Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind...

Romy
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5 posted 2001-06-07 10:22 AM


I like what you did with this challenge line.  It IS almost a compulsion to follow the wider path!
The format of your poem really adds to your message.
Debbie

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6 posted 2001-06-07 10:49 AM


very original.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


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7 posted 2001-06-07 09:18 PM


great job with this one faterider. . . a truly original work that presents a new look at an old problem. . .

I like it. . .

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dgvarner
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8 posted 2001-06-07 09:22 PM


hmmm...this is a thinker...  

heres what i say....be the best you that you can possibly be...and that dont mean you gotta be wealthy and from an ivy league school  

good write--take care of you faterider..

hugs, g


the boy said, my name's johnny
and it might be a sin
but i'll take your bet
you're gonna regret
i'm the best there's ever been!
-cdaniels

[This message has been edited by dgvarner (edited 06-07-2001).]

Gentle Spirit
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9 posted 2001-06-07 09:22 PM


I join heartily
and can only imagine
the bliss that
might have been mine
if i had the guts
to choose
the
N
A
R
R
O
W
path


an absolutely wonderful work of art with this piece.  Thank you.  *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

kaile
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10 posted 2001-06-08 04:32 AM


VAS, i won't consider my university an IVY league school but well i am threading the conventional path...your thought about how my university education will help me on the narrow path intrigues me...i never thought of it that way before...thanx a bunch for your reply...

i am glad that this was found to be insightful, being the rather childish, don't-careish person that i am....such positive feedback makes me yearn to write even more...

dg, its sooo good to hear from you...you take care also, yup???

thanx all

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