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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania 
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She glances at him with I couldn't care less eyes He stares through her, his mind, heart and mouth Embodied by a never ending stream of lies Why should she care, she's seen it all before He'll get over it soon enough, he always does But first he'll put a fist through the door He does this, things follow close to the plan She knew it would be this way, usually is She watched their fight before it even began And from the other room comes a scream A third partner in a relationship gone bad Awakening into the worst of a bad dream And so the tiny tot, she still sheds her tears Her parents scream, ignorance is still bliss She weeps, as she has done for many years Then the sound comes, cries are let out Only this time it's not the door that got hit A neighbor calls to see what it's all about Too bad she's too late, her nightmare is done The baby, she is quiet, as now she realizes Her life is over before it has truly begun He comes for her next, her fear still grows She may be only two, but that face she knows Tears streaming down, in her crib she's froze He looks, his little girl, all his joy and his pride He takes her life, said to be painless and quick Then he fell to his knees and to the sky he cried And still somehow I just can not quite cope With the fact that I heard the screams and shouts, That I could have been her only hope ~*~Born to Blossom and Bloom to Perish~*~ |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
You've written things no child should have to witness....bless you! Kathleen Blake |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A sad situation...I have a suggestion for a title...."Run" or "Run While You Can". James |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I'm sorry I read this. I hope it is fiction. I was going to pass it by but felt strangely compelled to respond. I feel rage at the man and anger for the woman. Rage at his inhumanity and anger for her failure to take action before the irretrievable loss of her child. I pray it is fiction. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
powerful write I too hope its fiction.. "caught in the middle," or even to pun "Cot in the middle" "Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Oh, goodness, this is sad beyond belief! It's awful what children have to face sometimes. I don't have a title to help you out, but I feel for you. Sauni Sauni :) |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
i wrote one similar to this called "Get out this time" i will have to dig it out of my poetry book and post it here soon,its very sad but you have captured it well  |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
First off, thank you all for your concern but the poem is completely fiction. I have a wonderful home life. Irish Rose, Thank you for your concern and reading. JamesMichael, Thank you for your suggestions. My friend suggested "Lost Hope" and although it's simple I think it works for this piece. Interloper, I guess I did my job because those were just the feelings I was after. I was hoping the rhyme didn't take away from the piece because I have learned from experience that tends to happen when I rhyme. Thanks. brian madden, Thank you for your suggestions. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Saunni, Thank you for your concern as well. Watersign6, Thank you. I will look forward to reading it. ~Susie ~*~Born to Blossom and Bloom to Perish~*~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
now this just speaks of things that need to be said. . . feelings that are all too real. . . you've captured them well here. . . excellent. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Sven, Such amazing compliments mean just that much more coming from a poet I look up to so much. ~Susie ~*~Born to Blossom and Bloom to Perish~*~ |
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