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Mabel A. Dilley
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0 posted 2001-06-04 04:02 PM




All afternoon I've sat cutting
an apple in slivers and eating them
sprinkled with cheese, but mostly
gazing down through the window
at the long scribble of light due North
where wind and weather come from.

The wind's been working itself up
in low gusts leaving branches chattering
and short grass turn into a sea rippling
like self-deception, a memory
of pushing limits in youth, that
intricate losing game of innocence
long overdue.

Potplants haven taken over the short lanai
and I've killed an innocent alpine
blue spruce before its appointed time.
I've migrated beyond the wrought iron
candlestick, the glasses for wine or brandy,
back to an ignorant passionate time
in our twenties and afternoons of listening
to breathing languages overcast like klezmer
with echoes, uneven sighs - I'd have known
any syllable anywhere.

The spider has spun her web from one edge
of wrought iron candlestick to candlestick
and I know not why - perhaps she
needs to spin a house within a house
on her own terms in cold and silence.


John Triffo

"I am not now that which I have been."

© Copyright 2001 Mabel A. Dilley - All Rights Reserved
brian madden
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1 posted 2001-06-04 04:20 PM


short grass turn into a sea rippling
like self-deception, a memory
of pushing limits in youth, that
intricate losing game of innocence
long overdue.


Really enjoyed the poem, the above part was especially strong. I really like the line
"intricate losing game of innocence
long overdue"  

"difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true
Brutal and mocking but always therea crutch for enmity's saddest glare"

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2 posted 2001-06-04 04:27 PM


Julian....this is art, inspired!
Mabel A. Dilley
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3 posted 2001-06-05 01:56 AM


Thank you Brian and Lady in White: I enjoyed very much writing this contemplative study.

"I am not now that which I have been."

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4 posted 2001-06-05 03:28 AM


ewwww - spiders!  Well I enjoyed your poetry but I could sure live without the subject matter!  Very well done, but do I expect any less?

~*~ Remember to tell someone today that you love them ~*~

Julian L. Chester
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5 posted 2001-06-15 09:23 PM


i realy dont quite understand but i do also like the poem and maybe if you would like you can email at J122983@aol.com and hopefully tell me what exactly does your poem mean and what was it explainings thanx. bye now
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