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Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

0 posted 2001-04-06 02:03 PM

Spiraling spirits
Speak softly, sincerely, soothe
Souls seeking silence

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 04-06-2001).]

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-04-06 02:05 PM

Sunshine~ this is soft....I like this

SEA

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

2 posted 2001-04-06 02:06 PM

Awe so soothing

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

3 posted 2001-04-06 02:06 PM

And how could this be more rhythmic even with rhyme? Beautiful Joyce

PoeticKnight
Senior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

4 posted 2001-04-06 02:18 PM

Somehow soothing, somewhat sensual, sometimes surreal.

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant

since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

5 posted 2001-04-06 02:48 PM

You steal right into the heart with this one girlie

Panne447
Member

since 2001-04-03

Posts 196
S.A. TX

6 posted 2001-04-06 02:51 PM

Sunshine, Nice alliteration, even the title, and a nice image. Would it were all the time like this for souls needing comfort. Panne

Wilfred Yeats
Member Elite

since 2000-08-04

Posts 2704
Wilmington, Delaware

7 posted 2001-04-06 04:19 PM

I read your poem - and all the siblant sounding (excuse my redundancy ~G~) replies - Seems I should shift to "T" as did E.A. Poe - and reply with something about tintanabulation ~G~ -
Kidding aside - you are in sure command of Senyru and I love every word !

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

8 posted 2001-04-06 04:24 PM

Oh my! Perfect use of alliteration and sentiment, it adds a nice touch, just wonderful!

Take care,
Melissa~

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

9 posted 2001-04-06 04:27 PM

Your senyru is soft, just like your spirit, that reached out and touched mine today in comfort - thank you Sunshine.

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

10 posted 2001-04-06 04:34 PM

alliteration
almost always attracting
active afterthought

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.

Charisma

Member Ascendant

since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

11 posted 2001-04-06 05:16 PM

wonderful senryu....love it sunshine.

((hugs))
Charisma

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