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Poetically Speaking ............ [an exercise]
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Poetically Speaking ............ [an exercise] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Poetically Speaking I listened to a poet’s reading, by a poet who has flair now I know that I’m needing, great magic beyond compare for the sing-song voice had fire, and flair, and verse and now I know to read aloud, and in that, to rehearse to bring about the cadence, the step, the song and dance should I ever chance, the rhyme, the rhythm, and the stance to share my poetry and words, with poets such as you given all of that, my meter still, less than thrilled, hasn’t got a clue should I fight this needy need, to let loose my grip and relinquish all my thoughts to free-verse and loose quip or should I design my refine and confine my soul to poetical correctness, lest it take it’s toll O I fear, great fear, do I, that I shall lose this battle, then cry a lonesome tear, for my fear is that I would belie this little belief that lies herein, within my darkened soul and that my light be dimmed, begrimed, of dusty poets old but poetically speaking, and I know it’s true I will strive to rhyme and meter, to please the poet, you. [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 04-06-2001).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Write to please yourself first...then if you want, write in rhyme and meter... Karilea, if it should come from your heart then it doesnt matter what the form or structure sometimes my words flow automatically in rhythm and rhyme and no matter how hard I try they can't be rewritten in free verse and other times like today, there wasn't a rhyme in my head and if I changed it to be in structured poetry, I would have lost the effect and feelings I was expressing...so please yourself and it will show to all and then it won't matter what form you write in. *s just my thoughts on the subject today huggzzz ~Wynter/Maureen "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You are poetically correct, my friend, and it is just in my nature not only to please myself, who is often at the bottom of the list, but to please those that would come in to read as well, but be turned off because it is not in "their form".... but that's me...trying to please everyone! It's just an exercise....not to worry....when my muse hits me over the head, you know I can't do anything but be her vessel.... huggssss right back at ya! |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sunshine~ I hope by now you know I love all that you write....you are so talented....I've wished often for half your skills....  You are an amazing, wonderful, sweet person....thank you over and over again for being you... Hugs, SEAIf I let you into my heart..... |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
It is your very freedom of expression - that makes your works such a pleasure to read - I'd have you no other way |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
poetically speaking. . . you're amazing. . . wonderful my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Dont you know by now that we love hearing from that beautiful heart of yours? Doesnt matter what form...what style...cuz its all beautifully you |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
LOL..."heart" wins....I've been told this is too "forced".... ah what ways my heart doth lie wherein I would just soft, sigh, a line to share beyond the pall just to bring, a smile to all.... |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Dear Sunshine, If you have ever read a poem of mine, you will notice that I always write in rhyme. I too was criticised for not writing in free form so I tried it a few times. Rhyme comes so much easier for me. If I don't use it I have no ruler to tell me if I am writing poetry or prose. That is my problem. You found your form and style and it was not rhyme so except for the fun of experimenting, you have no reason to change. Your poetry is beautiful, as is. Love, Joyce |
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PoeticaL Member
since 2001-03-31
Posts 50 |
Now you know I had to read this one because of it's title purely. This was a cool piece too. Glad you caught me like a fish on a line with the title hook! "I'm a junkyard full of false starts....Elliot Smith" |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Your works would please me if you mixed metaphors, stopped meter, neglected rhyme, fragmented verse, or all the above. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ OK ! Enough exercise for one day ! Now .. get back in line and dance the dance you do so well !  One - two and then ROCK ! One - two and then ROLL ! Just write for goodness sake ! It's simply good for your SOUL ! WRITE - and wrong you'll never be !  Loving the uniqueness that is YOU ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Totally impressive as always, Sunshine! Your poetry has a voice all its own and what an awesome voice it is! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Rhymed and metered or free verse; Structured Haiku or stream of thought; I will read you. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Anyone who would not appreciate your poetry because it is not their style is to narrow-minded to be called a poet. There are so many styles...so many forms..and so many human hearts. I believe that anyone who makes the choice to use structured rhyme owes it to themselves to learn the structure for only then can they present themselves as competent poets, in much the same way as an artist who must study basic techniques before putting brush to canvas, but for those who simply write from the heart in whatever manner they choose, who could possibly be qualified to criticize? Your writings are wonderful, Sunshine. Go with what you know best and continue to amaze your readers...of which I will always be one... |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
sunshine, the rhyme is devine, but your inner beauty that comes out is even more beautiful. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--Sorry I didn't see this till now...but I'll bet you got the message...we love you just the way you are...what ever way it is...because it's all heart. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh my dear friend...you need only please yourself BTW, did I mention I've missed you? |
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