Old shadows of Remembrance

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Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

0 posted 2001-03-24 09:02 AM

Rewrite:

Old shadows of remembrance

I stood and gazed the mountains once more.
Just as I gazed, with the eyes of before.
Different from those of one of eighteen.
Humbled in memory the stun of the scene.

The peaks cut across the light of the sun.
Filling the valley with red on the run.
And snow in the shade still glistens cold blue,
The only difference was not missing you.

The queazy still soars in lonesome encase
I still feel its awe, its giant embrace.
The distance, the fright, the night and the far,
The dazzle of stars on background of tar.

The peeling and loss a place called home,
The feeling of lost, the fear of alone.
I could not encase the call of the wild
I was a child of a climate of mild.

Aurora still modes prime colors in wed.
And I'm alive and the damn war is dead.

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

1 posted 2001-03-24 09:11 AM

And awe stands silent in yours forever read....

Janet Marie
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2 posted 2001-03-24 10:27 AM

Different from those of one of eighteen.
Humbled in memory the stun of the scene.

The peaks cut across the light of the sun.
Filling the valley with red on the run.
And snow in the shade still glistens cold blue,
The only difference was not missing you.

The queazy still soars in lonesome encase
I still feel its awe, its giant embrace.
The distance, the fright, the night and the far,
The dazzle of stars on background of tar.

The peeling and loss a place called home,
The feeling of lost, the fear of alone.
I could not encase the call of the wild
I was a child of a climate of mild.

Aurora still modes prime colors in wed.
And I'm alive and the damn war is dead.

=======================

*shaking me head* ....
nothing I could say will do this one justice...
the imagery ... the emotions ... the wisdom ... the intent...
this one will be with me for a long time of remembrance.

me

oh you speak to me in riddles
and you speak to me in rhymes
my body aches to breathe your breath
your words keep me alive
~Sarah McLachlan~

Martie

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3 posted 2001-03-24 10:31 AM

Sy--Powerful magic of words...very inspired writing!

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2001-03-24 02:04 PM

Sunshine,
My faithful reader. *L*

JM,
My tinkerbell rings her bell for me. Love Ya
Winkiewinkie.

Martie,
And a powerful thank you. *L*

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2001-03-24 04:14 PM

Seymour, my friend~
With phrases like these -
you paint the remembrance vividly.

'I stood and gazed the mountains once more.
Just as I gazed, with the eyes of before.'

'The peaks cut across the light of the sun.
Filling the valley with red on the run.'

'Aurora still modes prime colors in wed.
And I'm alive and the damn war is dead.'

Oh, yes ... dear poet -
the battle from within dies on the setting sun.

You are just WONDERFUL !
Verse is alive and flourishing in you !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

6 posted 2001-03-24 07:07 PM

And you are the wipped cream on my strawberrys. *L*

Sunshine

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7 posted 2001-05-02 08:05 AM

Much in need of seeing some light...the beauty that is....

Irish Rose
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8 posted 2001-05-02 08:33 AM

this is lovely!

Kathleen Blake

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and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

vandana

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9 posted 2001-05-02 10:47 AM

enjoy

Denise

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10 posted 2001-05-02 09:44 PM

Excellent writing, Seymour...excellent!

suthern

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Louisiana

11 posted 2001-05-03 10:28 AM

I'd missed this one, Seymour... maybe the fates were saving it for now to keep me from missing you so much... when the melancholy of memory weighs heavy. *S* Superb work... Of course, that's guaranteed when your name is on a poem! *S*

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

12 posted 2001-05-03 12:33 PM

The distance, the fright, the night and the far,

you always leave me a line or two to wish were mine..

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

Joyce Johnson

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13 posted 2001-05-03 03:13 PM

A wonderful poem that will take a lot of reading. Joyce

Watersign6
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Hurricane,WV

14 posted 2001-06-05 08:53 AM

will have to read this one many more times
for the joy it brings is full

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