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They're Breaking Dawn
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They're Breaking Dawn |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea 
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They're Breaking Dawn by Michael The shadows run as dawn comes forth Night's cloak pulled from the sky The birds on wing in morning song The earth breathes out a sigh Another day in life I have A gift that's given free To be who I have always been Or find the best in me Perhaps today to cause a smile Bring hope to someone's heart Or hold a hand and share a hurt And of their strength be part A canvas blank, I hold the brush It's really up to me To paint this day in loveliness Or just to let it be Perhaps to show my friends I care And how in me they live To share the love I feel for them That they so freely give Much like the dawn, dear children are So fresh and new, the best A ray of hope to shine in them Today this is my quest They're breaking dawn, I'm sunset old The world they soon will own It's up to us show the way For soon they will be grown Like sunrise diamonds on the sea Their youth is to behold It's up to us that all of them Be treasured much like gold Please light their paths and give your heart Show courage never fails That even grownups make mistakes Be wind that fills their sails Proust- |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
This is completely beautiful. You've captured the meaning of life wonderfully. I'm saving this for many wonderful reads. Thank you Auguste. "Often the test of courage is not to die but to live" |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Just A Woman, You don't know how good it makes me feel to know that you liked this enough to want to read it again sometime. Thank you very much. Michael Proust- |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
My dear friend, the depth of you understanding of life and the beauty of your work never ceases to amaze me. This is just wonderful.  Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Micahel: "A canvas blank, I hold the brush It's really up to me To paint this day in loveliness Or just to let it be" I love this stanza...how often we look but we don't see how many colors we can paint on a day... "They're breaking dawn, I'm sunset old The world they soon will own It's up to us show the way For soon they will be grown" What a lovely phrase, "they're breaking dawn", the whole poem is beautiful and uplifting! |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Dee, What a lovely and sweet compliment. Thank you. :-) I'm so pleased that you liked this. It is my most recently published poem. Still waiting on Bec to send me some of her writing. By the way, Ness in now on my site. :-) Martie, You never fail to make me feel so good about my writing when you post on one of my poem. You're always so kind and generous with your comments. Thank you, dear friend. Michael Proust- |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
A canvas blank, I hold the brush It's really up to me To paint this day in loveliness Or just to let it be =============================== Much like the dawn, dear children are So fresh and new, the best A ray of hope to shine in them Today this is my quest They're breaking dawn, I'm sunset old The world they soon will own It's up to us show the way For soon they will be grown Like sunrise diamonds on the sea Their youth is to behold It's up to us that all of them Be treasured much like gold Please light their paths and give your heart Show courage never fails That even grownups make mistakes Be wind that fills their sails =================================== I chose to read this because of the lovely poetic title ... once reading, finding so many wonderful poetic phrases and comparisons.. as well as superb employ of metaphor and imagery. very clever and creative to use nature's gifts to compare and define the innocence and promise of youth. a most enjoyable and impressive read... also impressive was your very well done cadence. All these elements enhanced the lovely message and moral of this write. "They're breaking dawn, I'm sunset old" that is a very cool line. well done poet sir. oh you speak to me in riddles |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"...like sunrise diamonds on the sea..." what a gift you've given me.... |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Janet, Your comments on my poetry are always more lovely than the poem itself. I sincerely and humbly thank you. Karilea, Thank you for reading this. It was published a couple of months ago and is also a permanent posting on a site for people striken with Neuropathy as a poem chosen to bring some beauty and hope into their lives. Such a great honor that is, too. Take care, my friend. Michael Proust- |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
What a beautiful outlook on life! Sunsets are lovely too you know! Betty Lou Hebert |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Triilium, Sunsets are indeed lovely. Thank you for enjoying this.  Michael Proust- |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Michael, Once again you've weaved your magic with your words and painted a magnificent picture for all to enjoy. It is obvious that these words come from such a kind soul. Thank you....Sue Suetang |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Sue, Such a sweet compliment. Thank you, dear. I'm glad you were able to read this one and that you enjoyed it. Michael Proust- |
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