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Martie

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0 posted 2001-03-31 09:02 PM

The Girl with Terra Cotta Eyes

The girl with terra cotta eyes knew the sidewalks
of the town,
she liked to walk them daily in her skirt
of just plain brown.

She would dance across the meadow as the town folk
watched with guile,
her peasant blouse allowing a glimpse
of gentle wile.

She sweetened and she sweatered all the children
of the glade,
with her they knew the flavor of a
summer lemonade.

She knew just how to listen and draw out
every truth,
never telling what was laying underneath
their simple youth.

I saw her one day sitting with the sunset
on her grace,
as the night was slowly fading, on her cheeks
it left its trace.

As I watched with fascination, she reach
and touch the place
where carved upon a tombstone was a
darling baby’s face.

She was singing, oh so softly, like a caress
it felt to me,
and although the words were softened, the sound
was tenderly.

I never knew what secret lay hidden
in her sigh,
that night I saw tears falling from her
terra cotta eyes.

[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 03-31-2001).]

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

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Ontario, CANADA

1 posted 2001-03-31 09:05 PM

Martie, this took my breath away! The flow, rhyme...everything is perfectly penned~

Take care,
Melissa~

Kethry
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Victoria Australia

2 posted 2001-03-31 09:19 PM

Martie,
I will never look at terra cotta in the same way again. Breathtaking!
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

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3 posted 2001-03-31 10:05 PM

I saw her one day sitting with the sunset
on her grace,
as the night was slowly fading, on her cheeks
it left its trace.

As I watched with fascination, she reach
and touch the place
where carved upon a tombstone was a
darling baby’s face.

She was singing, oh so softly, like a caress
it felt to me,
and although the words were softened, the sound
was tenderly.

I never knew what secret lay hidden
in her sigh,
that night I saw tears falling from her
terra cotta eyes.
=========================

Martie didnt JUST rhyme DIVINE ...
she composed a song of harmony...
some body call E-babes and have him bring his guitar.

this is a delight when read aloud.
And needless to say the intend of the verse is playing my heartstrings...
this is so lovely and poetically perfect Martie.

me

It's such a clever innocence with which you show myself to me
As if you know how it feels to never be who you wanted to be
~jackson browne~

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

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Spring, Texas

4 posted 2001-03-31 10:38 PM

Got to agree with everyone above Martie...wonderful, tender, yet sad tale here.

jwesley

Marge Tindal

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5 posted 2001-03-31 10:49 PM

Martie~
Tenderly tugging at these heartstrings again.
Beautifully engaging images, sweet poet.
Love n' hugs~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

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British Columbia, Canada

6 posted 2001-03-31 11:26 PM

Awhhh...this was just so sad, one never knows at first sight do they, the secrets held within. Beautiful images, and feeling to this one Martie.

JamesBowie
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since 2000-11-25

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big old Bangor Maine up by the shack

7 posted 2001-03-31 11:29 PM

this flows so well, and tells a sad little story. Write more.

Martie

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8 posted 2001-04-01 12:55 PM

Melissa--What a very nice thing to say...thank you.

Kethry--I was looking for some phrase to jump start my muse...and I don't know exactly where it came from...but, I guess one shouldn't question too much.

Janet--Harmony? Ya think...gosh! where is that Eric True?

jwesley--I'm always glad when you stop by to read one of my poems...thank you.

Marge--Thanks Marge..You always say such nice things.

Mysteria--No, I guess one doesn't...thanks so much for such a nice reply.

James--I'm glad you liked it...and you can count on me writing more.

Auguste

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since 2000-02-16

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By the sea

9 posted 2001-04-01 01:34 AM

Martie,

I liked this, though it was sad. It has nice imagery and a good story. Thanks.

Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

VAS
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Oregon

10 posted 2001-04-01 01:53 AM

An extremely poignant story! Martie you carve such lovely images with your words.

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

11 posted 2001-04-01 07:23 AM

I saw her one day sitting with the sunset
on her grace,
as the night was slowly fading, on her cheeks
it left its trace.

I may not often say it but I love the way you write...

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

12 posted 2001-04-01 07:38 AM

You heart-string puller, you....take care of you....I'll check in with you soon.....

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

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Louisiana

13 posted 2001-04-01 03:45 PM

Oh, I love this one!!! It reminds me of some wonderful souls I know... who brighten the lives of others so readily but shed their tears alone. This is beautiful sadness so very well written!

Wilfred Yeats
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Wilmington, Delaware

14 posted 2001-04-02 10:32 AM

How - I mean HOW - do you do it?

I swear - If you don't publish AND put this Foremost in the book (I can visualize the title now: The Girl with Terra Cotta Eyes and other poems - By Martie Odell Ingebretsen)
I don't know what I am going to do with you -
Another vision I have: You as the first female Poet Laureate of United States (I'm serious!)

jellybeans
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15 posted 2001-04-02 11:12 AM

this is incredible martie...you get better and better with each poem i read

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