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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Lust We have the New Testament to thank For our definition of lust. By this I refer Not to the moment When we glance, With surprise And interest, Upon the arrival of a friend Or acquaintance, As we would a meteorite, But later, When deep in night, We get up, Put on our pants, shirt, and hunting boots, Then tramp outside To dig it up. RMW |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
RMW, An interesting write, I enjoyed the read. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
hehe... well.. i LOVE the title.... i don't really get the digging it up part and the putting the pants and boots on... but... hey, it's an interesting concept, i guess... i thought the title would more lend itself to taking the boots and pants off.... hmmmm..... now that's an interesting concept, as well, eh? LOL well, whatever you have to do to get it... go dig it up if you need to.... usually it just wakes me up in the middle of the night all by itself and then.... oh never mind i'll just write a poem about it... rofl *wink* -There is no Devil. Just God when He drinks. - Tom Waits |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
Love vs. Lust..... When deep in night, We get up, Put on our pants, shirt, and hunting boots, Then tramp outside To dig it up. Looking for love in all the wrong places???....barhopping perhaps..LOL Nice thought provoking poem. Mike |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
I love the way this leaves the reader to search for the clues within your words. I ponder....the New Testament? I shall reflect. Wonderful, Bob, you've perked my interest with this! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Unstill thoughts make not for soundful sleep. (o: This is grand. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Seymour...Thank you. Doreen ..... I think you may be right. This may be much to cryptic. Must learn to be more direct. Thanks much. Mike....Was never much good at barhopping...lack the coordination I think. Though I do recall one night singing THE "hymn" from atop a taxi in Juarez. Thanks for the comments. Just A Woman ... So kind. I think that what I was after was the contrast between noticing, admiring, appreciating versus "dwelling on". Probably needs some work. Claire....Thank you, and you are absolutely right. Bob |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
No, Bob...no....I see exactly what you mean....and I LIKE it very much! Very much indeed..... well done Sir! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Tis one thing to casually flirt, quite another to become obsessed, yes? Corinne |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
cryptic is everything!! trust me on this one... if they come up with multiple meanings ? .... ahhh.... that's my goal.... and yours here is cryptically perfectly intriguing.... again, my praise.... thanks for the read |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
RMW, I got the cryptic meaning as being it's the going back after you buried it that makes it sinful. Write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Took reading it just twice...not so cryptic. First glance...innocent, digging it up...deliberate. Somehow guilt by association with lust. Very thought provoking. Enjoyed! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Interesting poem, I had a hard time following to be truthful  Kathleen Blake |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Sunshine, Corinne, doreen, Kethry, JLR and Irish Rose...thank you all for the interest. I think that the comments ended up being more thought provoking than the poem. Bob |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
enjoyed much....monday morning is much too early for my brain to untwist a cryptic poem *s* but....reading the comments helped, really liked it...like your thoughts and the way you present yourself, guess I am not around enough to have read you before but will correct that in the future |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Oh, yes, RMW, when it enters our hearts, awakens us, even from deep sleep and moves us to action...well woven piece! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
ROFL - I don't know why - but this one struck me funny. Didin't see where you were headed with this at first... but I enjoyed it. Michael |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Jellybean and Virgina...thanks folks. Michael....Funny works with me. In fact, "funny" is how I feel when the title of this poem keeps popping up on the forum. I'm still getting accustomed to the way this place works....technically. Had I remembered that the title was going to continue to parade across the screen, arcade fashion, I would have brought a rifle to put an end to it. Thanks for sharing. Bob |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Very interesting take on this one, Bob. It is funny in a way! All writing comes |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
perhaps, you were hunting for more than you bargained for. Maybe a few hidden treasures, ummmmm. |
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JamesBowie Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 252big old Bangor Maine up by the shack |
This is my #1 for the day. Interesting and may leave interpretation to the reader which is in truth where the true meaning of a poem lies. Ya know though this could be of a serial killer who likes to look at his past victims- see way open to interpretation |
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thecraig Member
since 2001-03-11
Posts 223 |
Yes I have to agree the spooky side takes Jack the ripper to the boot sale. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Lusty, Bob, and deserves to go back up to the top of the list. Cor |
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