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The Man in the Moon
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The Man in the Moon |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
The Man in the Moon I'd known him as a meadow frozen Bright and clear And laced with paths Woven by the deer Come out of the thicket. Later, Amidst that somersault of reason Where meteorites flashed upwards In obscenely sulfurous venting, Slashing at the tropic sky As if to break its wealth of crystalline, I felt the Southern Cross slip by And the pale, round, quiet calling Of the Chaplain. RMW |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Love the phrase: "the somersault of reason" fantastic!!! |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
To choose one lovely phrase over another defeats the wonderfulness of the whole. I tried to choose just one phrase, but my eyes and mind wandered to the next, and the next until a wonderful read ended. Marvelous writing. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
excellent images Bob. . . well done. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Virginia, Julian, and Sven....Thank you so much. A land mine is an ugly thing, especially when juxtaposed the beauty of the stars...or Princess Di. Again, you are most kind. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Another beautiful poem from your pen my friend... |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Thank you Paula. Bob |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
loved the deer theme |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
Woven by the deer Come out of the thicket... ------------------------------------ that line paints a beautiful picture.. much enjoyed this read! hugs, g where am i...WHOA! and what am i doing in this handbasket!?! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
These images are stunning! All writing comes |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Beautiful phrases intensify the horror, almost surreal in a hushed image of slow motion, of the impact of this event. Good writing, Bob, of an important, troubling poem. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Irish Rose, dgvarner, Lone Wolf, and Claire....Thank you for reading and commenting on this poem. Claire, your slow motion observation was especially acute. Again, thanks all. Bob |
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