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Gypsy Queen
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Gypsy Queen |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now 
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“GYPSY QUEEN” by Bill Charles ~~~~ She was a gypsy woman, with silky coal black hair, green eyes instead of dark, and skin somewhat fair… Wanted someone that would care, and to love, but no matter, a true blood and sweet, as a dove… Lovely and gracious she is, any man would want, and when she looked at you, her piercing eyes would haunt… She had a lonely but gracious heart, that was warm, and would dance all through the night, into the early dawn… As she danced to the roaring fire, that lit up the sky, into camp came a gypsy king, and caught her eye… The flames leaped into the heavens, as she twirled, with dress to her hips, and arms stretched out, but curled… They danced together, into the softness of the night, holding, and staring at each other, until a love they found, pristine… He placed her on his horse, and they rode off into the sunrise, this lonely gypsy woman, and the king, for she, would be his queen… ~~~~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
A very descriptive poem Bill ... I could see the enchanting dance by the fire, very nicely done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
a very nice write, indeed! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
if only...even Queen for a day... ~Smiles, Bill ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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Ariana Senior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 571Orlando, Florida |
BC Very nicely done. Your imagery is great and I can picture the king coming in and sweeping her off her feet. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I loved this Bill...and it's a tricky thing dancing by the fire in those swirling skirts!  Artfully descriptive BC! |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Very lyrical content with a fairy tale quality I like very much, great imagery too. Thanks for sharing. Regards, Olias. |
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latin passion Senior Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 576 |
Oh Bill, how true to your words, sent chills in me, as I read each and every word. The gypsy in me, is still seeking her teacher steadfast -- upon her white horse. I loved the part where he carries her off, to sweet oblivion. Forgive my misspelling, I running amuck, I look forward to your writings.LP |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
There are some powerful images within this piece, Bill! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
you know that I loved this one BC. . . it's totally you. . . what a picture you've shown here. . . ----------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Sounds superb to me... Does she have to have dark hair though???... Sandy blondish... hazel eyes... geesh... All gypsies aren't dark, are they???... Yep - The rest is super...  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I love coal black hair...I would spot her from a mile away...of course brown and blond and red are nice also...just a preference...James |
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Amuse_mi Member
since 2001-04-22
Posts 110 |
I thought about this piece all morning. Here's the inspiration for your gypsies: Gypsy eyes, Belied the guise Of times True innocence. And in the hide Of dancing's tide She held Her gypsy prince. He smiled While she denied A force So innocuous, To rise At her demise A promise: Love instantaneous! |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
This is one that slipped by me before, but it is lovely. A gypsy queen worthy of her king. Joyce |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Kit - I did enjoy writing this, and could also see her by the fire. Sunshine - thank you sunshine. nakdthoughts - the one called' my lady', would be my queen, if only for a day. Ariana - thank you for your reply, and the king will come in, and sweep her off her feet. serenity - glad that you liked it...and one must watch dancing by the fire an a swirling skirt, for when watching her, the fires will burn my heart. OLIAS - I love to write like this, and thank you for your kind words. latin passion - a teacher I would be, of words if not more. The mountain not an obstacle, for I and my white horse. Thank you for your gentle words. VAS - I also see those images, and wish that at this every moment I could be there. Sven - my friend, I certainly thank you for seeing me in this writing. At times it is I, in my mind. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Nan - I close my eyes and see, hair of sandy blondish, hazel eyes, and that darn lighthouse. No, all gypsies are not dark, as I am fair, and one. JamesMichael - coal black hair, silky for tender fingertips, but of course brown, blond, red, and others are also nice, as you say. Amuse_mi - your reply sighed as I read it, and it entered my heart, touching with a caress of these gentle words, that you have written. Joyce Johnson - glad that you came back to read this. And the king is humble, before his queen. |
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