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Obtuse lines in pain
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Obtuse lines in pain |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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In the middle of the dark night, I am woken up with cold fright, by phantoms squealing in my head; I shake uncontrollably in a desperate cold shiver, feeling very lonely and weak, as if my strength's draining away as if my life's dragging its feet! I am so empty in my heart, like a bottomless pit's in there, like a chasm in its divide, with nothing to refill the gap. My head hurts in sharp prickly pains caused by a thousand thinking pins being needled by crown of thorns inside-out, my scalp outside-in! You know this very well my dear, that I really need you so much, that I do miss your lovely smiles, that I'm yearning for your kisses, that I'm seeking your loving arms, that I'm not myself without you, that I can't face this big world alone, that my only true love is for you. Please find your way, this way, my dear! And you will find me waiting here, caught in this stand-still forever, unwilling to move anywhere - in inertia and motionless! Just for the true reason because -- You are the one who helped me move, leading me to the path of love, a path where the sun shone so bright a path lit up by divine light! The path's now in its darkest night, leading to a home with dark rooms, where this romeo lives alone, with yesterday's unfulfilled dreams! Please find your way, this way, my dear! '!' |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Very nicely written Sudhir! Sorrowful, and yet holds sweet anticipation ... lovely to read you again!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Those days when love is newly lost are such a difficult time. You portray them well, Sudhir. I'm hoping all is well with you - and I'm very pleased to see you posting more..  |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I'm pleased to see you posting again, as well. I feel the deep pain in this as I have experienced it to the point of being physically ill. Be well. Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee [This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 03-27-2001).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Kit, Thanks so much for your words... Nan, Thanks a lot... I am feeling better posting a lot too though I am quite low on gas these days... hopefully the difficult days will end soon...Kathleen, Thank you so much... there is deep pain within... Regards to all, Sudhir |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
obtuse?..don't see it my friend-- good poem! Jamie |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you Jamie... regards, sudhir |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
So much longing in this, it's great to read you again, Sudhir! Corinne |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I read this again and saw one of your replies, I know about deep pain, I know, it's the only way to describe when you feel; your insides are open to the world. My prayers and heart go out for you, whatever it is. Kathleen Blake |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Corinne, Thank you so much for coming by and your response... Kathleen, I am honoured that you came by a second time... and thanks for your kind words... and prayers... regards, sudhir |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
my goodness Sud, your ache rises of the page those first several verses are so powerfully purged and expressive ... but we heal and grow stronger as we write out the emotions. excellent work wise poet sir  take care of you sweet Sudhir. oh you speak to me in riddles |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sudhir--There is a reason why we experience such sadness...it is an expression of just how great the joy was...yes, and in the end it gives us strength and hopefully a bit of wisdom. Hugs! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Such sorrow and loneliness... so well written! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you so very much, my friend Janet... for everything... Martie, what an uplifting way to think... If only I can think like that... thanks for your words and the hugs... Suthern, thank you so much... regards to all, sudhir |
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