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Sabotage ... In Cinquain
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Sabotage ... In Cinquain |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Sabotage- In Cinquain A tear Flux to vast pool Wails the woe of loves gloom The lips that lie have bred the fool Blame self Marina March 26/2001 It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley [This message has been edited by Marina (edited 03-27-2001).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
ohhhh, this is very good!  SEA |
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Panne415 Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 104San Antonio |
Marina, Very nice formal cinquain. Afraid I don't know what is meant by 'vas' but I think I can get the jist w/o it. Panne [This message has been edited by Panne415 (edited 03-26-2001).] |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
i agree...very nice formal cinquain..yet like panne, i am afraid i dont understand "vas"....explanations please? i like cinquains and if you have written more of them, i will be glad to read and respond...  |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
It is nice to see a "proper" cinquain. Yours is elegant. My favorite remains the classic, Tuscon Rain; however, entice me again: I may very well change my favorite hit list of cinquain. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Marina, I like very much.... stop Interesting form...stop must attempt... stop later... stop Parker stupid...stop |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Sea, thank you. i have been struggling with my muse for quite sometime. I thought trying new styles may help. Panne, I think my typo may have thrown you off. It is now corrected and reads as "vast". Thanks for stopping by. Faterider, I am afraid it is my only Cinquan to date. However, I did very much enyoy writing this style. I think I will be doing more of them. Thank you.. Julian, thank you. I am not familiar with the Cinquain you mentioned. I'll have to check it out. As far as enticing you goes...becareful what you wish for.  James, you need professional help...stop morse code suits you...stop you never could write a full sentence...stop  Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
it's nice to see you stretching yourself. . . this is excellent. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
hi marina, do continue to write those cinquains..i have a soft spot for short poems.... |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Sven, thank you. Kaile, I really did enjoy this style. In fact I have now written more. Check in later, there may be more. Thanks again. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
very cool Marina-girl ... I had to go to Nans workshop and refresh my self on the requirements of a Cinquain .. which is always cool when we learn something as we go. I will have to give this a try sometime... doing these formats are always great ways to jumpstart a lacking muse... So great to see your name here my friend.. yes...give us more Marina muse oh you speak to me in riddles |
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S Arthur Grey Senior Member
since 2001-03-19
Posts 719woven by a poet's loom |
Marina, This inspired me to submit a Cinquain, and I think I'll do some more too. S Arthur |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Janet, thank you. You are definitely right. I have struggled for months to find my muse again and trying different styles has made a HUGE difference. Although there are some who wonder why I couldn't write when I had the inspiration right in front of me.  nudge nudge.S Arthur, I am glad it has inspired you also. I look forward to reading them. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen |
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