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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Dream of me as if I was real Touch me so that I may feel And know about life When all things right, My lips do knowingly unseal Open arms and that look in your eyes Lifting me up to heights so high Body disengaged, Leaving one so aged Floating corporeal, like clouds in the sky Protect me from myself today No matter the words I say Nor the flesh you touch Could ever mean so much Unless I was gone away Parted lips and moist by far Wherever our broken bodies are You try to insist Nothing exists, Until I show you all the stars Teach me more than I thought to learn So that I could teach you in turn Together on fire Still higher and higher So that we, as those very stars, can burn |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah yes, you painted the light.... well done, Poetic Knight.... |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Well done. Joyce |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
leaving me breathless......  nice SEA |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Dream of me as if I was real Touch me so that I may feel ========================= Open arms and that look in your eyes Lifting me up to heights so high Body disengaged, Leaving one so aged Floating corporeal, like clouds in the sky Protect me from myself today No matter the words I say Nor the flesh you touch Could ever mean so much Unless I was gone ====================== You try to insist Nothing exists, Until I show you all the stars Teach me more than I thought to learn So that I could teach you in turn Together on fire Still higher and higher So that we, as those very stars, can burn ========================= the blend of poetic phrases, imagery and emotion in this is perfection... your poems always have those very cool-opening "hook" lines ... that draw the reader to the poem right off and the clever employ of the ethereal theme, that is carried thru out-- makes the poem... as does the cool rhyme scheme you chose here. classic PK ... taking our breath away *S* Though my soul may sit in darkness, |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
PoeticKnight, So beautiful and romantic.. I loved it. TaraB |
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