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The Circles Above My Eyes.....(pantoum)
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The Circles Above My Eyes.....(pantoum) |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA 
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our lives are filled with circles, thirsting like bubbles from a plastic wand floating, merging, soaring, bursting life floats on and on and on like bubbles from a plastic wand drifting through the summer trees life floats on and on and on on whims of every gentle breeze drifting through the summer trees we venture through God's tempting leaves on whims of every gentle breeze a trek towards everlasting peace we venture through God's tempting leaves with dreams of never-ending flight a trek towards everlasting peace on longing journeys ever slight with dreams of never-ending flight floating, merging, soaring, bursting on longing journeys ever slight our lives are filled with circles, thirsting [This message has been edited by Packratmike (edited 04-18-2001).] |
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Panne447 Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 196S.A. TX |
Wow Mike, you ARE really into this form and doing a wonderful job at it too I might add (IMHO) I thoroughly enjoyed this one too. I loved the etherealness (if there is such a word)- I'm too tired to think clearly - of this whole piece while still painting the picture of our lives in their mundaneness and their surprises. Simply super. I may be a bit jealous...of how easy you do these..as I like the form but it is a lot of sweat and work and frustration and delight for me - so I can't do them unless I have some time- these last 2 weeks I haven't had any at all. WTG. Panne |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
Thank you Panne...it's always a pleasure to read your kind and thorough remarks. I'm not sure that I do these as easily as you might think. This one took me a few days of off and on work. I agree with you about the sweat, frustration and delight in composing pantoums, but after one has come altogether, the delight takes over all the time spent struggling with it. If you like, when I get time, I'll e-mail you a description on how I put this one together. The method I used here and in the others I've written kind of helps me collect and organize my thoughts as I move along. Maybe it would be helpful to you??? Thanks again..(I now have to go look up "etherealness") Mike p.s. Looked it up...it's in the dictionary! Good work, Panne! |
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