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Embers_Before_God
Member

since 2001-03-06

Posts 101
USA

0 posted 2001-04-15 11:54 AM

We went.
We went together
toward trees and laughing winds
smacking leaves of different rainbow
shades. We went. We went alone
into the darkness. Under a moon,
fat and oval, purple skies
lingered far away,
yearning for one faint touch,
a silk-like touch,
of soft, pale skin like that of your hands.
We went. We went and left our luggage at home,
closed and locked without air, without breath.
We went. We went and we breathed.
Smelt salt from oceans and gritty grains
from wet sands. A single seashell slept on shore,
washed up from high tide.
We bent.
We bent together,
our shirts--
mine a blue pastel,
yours a light paisley pink--
flapping through cool, nighttime breezes.
We touched.
Our hands touched the shell together,
felt its hard, rough exterior,
curved and pointed and misshapen.
We dreamt.
We dreamt together,
staring at the ivory shell,
breathless luggage forgotten,
worries fading,
trouble and all ills tossed aside
by the crashing white waters of the
surf. We walked. We walked together
to our room, hands intertwined,
lust feeding our minds. We went to bed
together and together we came.
We came.

TkB
Copyright © 2001
All Rights Reserved

Dance with me under the moon. Touch my pale skin. Devour me. Love me.

[This message has been edited by Embers_Before_God (edited 04-15-2001).]

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2001-04-15 01:38 PM

..as it should be .. when two touch as one.
very cool poem Embers...
imagery rich...
well done use of repetative phrasing and theme.

In another life...I know I loved you then
Lightning strikes twice...we're destined again.
We dont have to make promises...we were always meant to be

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

2 posted 2001-04-15 05:12 PM

Very romantic, and I absolutely loved the word sequence used to set the scenes, went, bent, touched, dreamt, walked, and came! Excellent poem, a real keeper.

~*~ I write, therefore I am ~*~

KokoStewartKoomoa
Senior Member

since 2000-12-04

Posts 580
Waikiki, Hawaii

3 posted 2001-04-15 07:44 PM

Wonderful imagery and style!

Aloha with warmest regards, Koko
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[This message has been edited by KokoStewartKoomoa (edited 04-15-2001).]

Katherine Chandler
Member

since 2001-03-07

Posts 280
Florida, USA

4 posted 2001-04-16 11:44 PM

This is a keeper for sure, Embers. I just have to say I'm partial to the last line, but truly enjoyed every word, my friend.

You are on a roll and I love it!

Kate

Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.
T S Eliot

Embers_Before_God
Member

since 2001-03-06

Posts 101
USA

5 posted 2001-04-17 12:03 PM

Thank you all for your kind words...Embers

Mabel A. Dilley
Senior Member

since 2001-03-17

Posts 859
Seattle, WA, USA

6 posted 2001-04-17 03:56 PM

So now I find the truth of you my friend: you are a hopeless romantic. Good job. Excellent writing.

"I am not now that which I have been."

Embers_Before_God
Member

since 2001-03-06

Posts 101
USA

7 posted 2001-04-17 11:46 PM

I guess I showed a tad bit of myself...thanks, Julian.......Embers

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