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this poet........(triple rictameter)
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this poet........(triple rictameter) |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA 
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to live with loving words lips pressed against my ear would far surpass the doubts and fears left on doorsteps or behind rusted gates. Breathing without your love, shallow, wordless, would not be this poet's reason to live. to dream in loving thoughts upon your feather bed would be so much more heavenly than visions of you, lost in faint moonlight. Searching in eternal darkness, emptiness, would not fill this poet's heart to dream. to die with loving words upon my final breath would be much sweeter than dying 'midst the shortened stroke of a key or brush. Imprisoned in incompleteness forever, would not be this poet's way to die. [This message has been edited by Packratmike (edited 04-12-2001).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PackRatMike~ My goodness ! These are just LOVELY ! Great job on the flow and the form. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Mike~ these are really wonderful.....maybe I'l try doing a few that go together  SEA |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Shoot! I just learn this, then you triple raise the bar with so much more! Wonderful! |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
Marge...Thank you. I had to struggle a bit with these but I guess they came out o.k. I had to search a little deeper and go a little further than I usually do. SEA...Thank you. Try it, I think you'll enjoy it. I actually started this one with the last stanza which would stand alone, but I felt I wanted to express more, so, I added the first two. Sunshine...Oh, I'm sure somebody will beat this triple. I feel the trick is not to ramble on aimlessly or endlessly just for the sake of writing an additional stanza. Thank you. Mike |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Applause! All poets will relate!~ Take care, Melissa~ |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice poem |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
Thank you, Melissa....I hope so. Thank you, vandana. Mike [This message has been edited by Packratmike (edited 04-12-2001).] |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
well done - bravo - truly impressive ~S~ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I enjoyed this too, Mike. A well wrapped strand of thoughts. (o: Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
Thank you, Wilfred...glad you liked this one. Thank you, Claire. Mike |
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