Spring Comes [if not Cinquain, then .... just poetry...]

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Open Poetry #13

Spring Comes [if not Cinquain, then .... just poetry...]

Sunshine

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0 posted 2001-04-11 01:37 PM

Spring Comes

white plum
trees swaying wild
foxtrot, samba, rumba
white dress, no music, just the wind
dance me

~*~

red bud
holding tightly
flowers colored purple
how did purple become such red
beauty

~*~

peach trees
soft fragrant pink
blossoms unfolding now
soon sweet fruit bearing down to pick
pick me

~*~

unfold
not just flowers
blossoming all around
come forth, smell spring’s fragrance, just...here
spring comes

Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2001-04-11 01:43 PM

I believe these are true cinquains Sunshine,
and oh are these written so well.....
Dance me..........I loved that line. Beautiful and going into the library. *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

painted lady
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2 posted 2001-04-11 01:44 PM

These are fun, Sunshine. I especially like the white plum. And I'm envious, spring is just awakening here.

pl

And then my heart with pleasure fills,
And dances with the daffodils. Wm Wordsworth (I Wondered Lonely as a Cloud)

Mysteria

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3 posted 2001-04-11 01:53 PM

These were lovely, and refreshing, and you know what I liked the best, I didn't care what they were, they were beautiful!

walker
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4 posted 2001-04-11 01:58 PM

Lovely!

A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes.

SEA

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5 posted 2001-04-11 02:10 PM

***clapping hands wildly*** YES!! SO pretty!! Awesome Cinquains! Yea for Sunshine!!

SEA

Packratmike
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6 posted 2001-04-11 02:16 PM

Excellent Sunshine! Looks like cinquains to me. Wonderful read.

Mike

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Chelsea~
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7 posted 2001-04-11 02:25 PM

sunshine,

i'm not exactly clear
on what a cinquain is,
but these are wonderful,
i like the first and the
last ones

Interloper

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8 posted 2001-04-11 07:26 PM

fragrance
yours mixed with spring
blossoming, spreading, not flowers
just here

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9 posted 2001-04-11 11:20 PM

they are...and so are you, Sunshine

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10 posted 2001-04-12 11:30 AM

These were just too much fun, and with the visuals I've been getting of spring around my stomping grounds, these came so easily!

Thank you everyone!

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