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Auguste

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By the sea

0 posted 2001-04-10 02:05 PM

I Call Her in My Dreams

by Michael

I call her in my dreams at night
I whisper all the day
I've seen her in the twilight
As she strolls along the way

But it's not her, this captured gaze
So short would be her life
Just seagulls on an evening breeze
It is not her, my wife

In days now lost she clung to me
Until that day drew near
A breath of love we whispered free
I whisper still, my dear

I long to have her back with me
So I no longer mourn
And hold her through the dark, still night
Until the day is born

The house is as it was that day
With all her things in place
As though she will be coming back
And I will see her face

But deep within I know she's gone
To never be again
Soft melodies she used to hum
How I remember when

As sky becomes a dusty lace
And azure melts to grey
Soft starlight paints the scenery
As shadows show the way

She is not here this quiet night
Fate took revenge, it seems
She has now lost herself in light
And I am lost in dreams

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

RMW
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1 posted 2001-04-10 03:43 PM

Michael.....I am surprised to find that I am the first to comment. This is quite touching, truly. Bob

Mabel A. Dilley
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2 posted 2001-04-10 04:02 PM

This is truly oustanding both in thought and deed. Lovely structure and well as very moving thought. I judged this to be at least a 2 kleenex read.

"I am not now that which I have been."

Lady In White

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3 posted 2001-04-10 04:02 PM

This is so quietly haunting, a beautiful, sad write....

Honeybee
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4 posted 2001-04-10 04:04 PM

Michael~

What a beautiful piece of melancholy! The last verse touched me, you truly have a marvelous gift to pen such heartfelt poetry~

Take care,
Melissa~

Greeneyes

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5 posted 2001-04-10 05:40 PM

Always so nice to be lost in those dreams, beautifully penned from you mu friend...

Greeneyes~

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"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."
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elizabeth anne
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6 posted 2001-04-10 07:00 PM

Wonderful writing Michael! I especially love the last two lines..
Very moving..

Elizabeth Anne

Martie

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7 posted 2001-04-10 07:25 PM

Michael--To loose a precious love hurts, I know..."just seagulls in an evening breeze", and "lost herself in light". You have written a feeling that is hard to express, with great tenderness and with perfect words to express the feeling. Hugs!

Suetang
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8 posted 2001-04-12 01:31 AM

Michael

I'm so sorry to read of your sadness and wish nothing but the best for you. I hope good things will come to you and fill your life with the happiness you so deserve.
Take care my friend......Sue

Suetang

Jeffrey Carter

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9 posted 2001-04-12 02:05 AM

*sobbing* Very touching tale Michael

Sunshine

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10 posted 2001-04-12 09:24 AM

quote:

As sky becomes a dusty lace
And azure melts to grey
Soft starlight paints the scenery
As shadows show the way

what imagery!

Auguste

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By the sea

11 posted 2001-04-12 05:57 PM

Bob,
Thank you.  I wrote this poem many years ago and it wasn't until recently that I revised it with the help of gifted poet.  I'm glad you liked it.

Julian,
Thanks for the "outstanding" and for liking this one.

Lady In White,
I appreciate you coming by to see this.  Thank you for the nice words.

Melissa,
Marvelous gift?  Not really.  Just writing from the heart, as all poets do.  Thank you.

Lauren,
I'm happy to see you here.  It pleases me that you found something in this one you like.  Thanks.

Elizabeth Anne,
Thanks for reading.  I do hope someday to be able to see some of your poetry here.

Martie,
This is fiction, though I'm glad you found it touching.  I appreciate you reading this.

Sue,
Again, just fiction.  Still, I thank you for reading and for your kindness.

Jeffrey,
Thank you.  I'm glad this piece touched you.

Karilea,
Thank you for reading and I'm very pleased that you liked the imagery in this one.

Thank you, all.
Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

Marge Tindal

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12 posted 2001-04-12 07:09 PM

Michael~
What a lovely, heartbreaking piece of writing.
Such melancholy mixed with beautiful imagery ...
REALLY good.
Glad you dusted it off and shared it with us.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Rosebud1229
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13 posted 2001-04-12 07:25 PM

I agree very melancholy, but beautiful.

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