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By the sea

0 posted 2001-04-09 01:47 PM


Timid Whispers

by Michael


The climbing sun
burns away
the cool, damp freshness
of morning
and as it does,
it becomes
just another day
like
all the rest.

I walk
along the shore,
still shrouded in mist,
picking up shells
the receding tide has
left stranded.

The call of gulls,
that lonely,
mournful
sound,
so like my thoughts.

I turn to see
one set of prints
left
in the sand.

I remember when another's
would've been beside my own.

Holding hands,
we would've laughed
and joked
as we walked beside
the sea.

In timid whispers,
I still speak
her pretty name
and so ache
for
her dear touch.


Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

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1 posted 2001-04-09 01:49 PM


Michael, Sir....this is beautiful....thank you for this one!
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2 posted 2001-04-09 01:50 PM


So innocently beautiful. Very well written !  
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3 posted 2001-04-09 02:06 PM


Wow.  Heartfelt work. Heartfelt thanks for your work.

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.


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4 posted 2001-04-09 04:41 PM


So sad and haunting..beautiful

Elizabeth Anne

Mabel A. Dilley
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5 posted 2001-04-09 05:11 PM


I walked that sand with but one pair of prints left behind to the swell of time and tide. Good write!

"I am not now that which I have been."

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6 posted 2001-04-09 05:41 PM


Oh how lovely your poem is...
Thank you for sharing an exquisite write PoetFriend...
~coco~

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7 posted 2001-04-09 05:46 PM


I turn to see
one set of prints
left
in the sand.

I like it very much.

I love to nice poetry.

Doug Pretorius
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8 posted 2001-04-09 05:52 PM


Beautiful and so sweet, until the end, sigh the end is so sad :`(

Thank you for writing and sharing such a wonderful poem.

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9 posted 2001-04-09 09:22 PM


Michael, as usual you write with such love and feeling. This is such a sad story, but so enjoyable.

Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand

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10 posted 2001-04-09 09:42 PM


Michael
So very beautiful but so sad.  May much happiness come your way as you deserve good things......Sue

Suetang

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11 posted 2001-04-09 11:12 PM


Micheal memories never go away, this is beautiful.
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12 posted 2001-04-10 12:44 PM


Michael~

Perhaps upon
return of tide
one will come
to walk beside
hold your hand
in gentle spray
as footprints dance
where sea gulls play

*Yours was so lovely ...
pure inspiration.
Thank you for sharing.
~*Marge*~

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13 posted 2001-04-10 03:34 AM


Karilea,
Thank you.  I'm so glad you liked this one.  

Brad,
Ever have a story come from nowhere and just beg to be written?  This is one of those.  Thank you.

Interloper,
I have to tell you, I really like hearing "wow's...thank you.  

Elizabeth,
Haunting?  Perhaps, but isn't real life also a bit of the same?  Thanks and I'm glad you found pleasure is this piece.

Julian,
Thank you for your kindness and good words.

Coco,
Hey, haven't seen you since I came back to Passions.  How have you been?  Thank you for coming by and reading this.  

Waseem,
Thank you.  I'm glad you liked this.

Doug,
Yes, the end is a little sad, huh?  Think I should change it?  I don't know, I kinda like it the way it is.  What do you think?  Thank you, Doug.

Dee,
Thank you, sweetheart.  I really enjoyed talking with you tonight.  Of course, I always do.  

Sue,
You are always so sweet and good to me.  Thank you.

Rosebud,
Thank you.  I'm glad you liked this, Rosebud.  Not a memory, just a story.  Take care.  I do so appreciate your posts on my work.

Marge,
I liked your poem.    Thank you for liking this.  You're sweet.


Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

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