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jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

0 posted 2001-04-09 11:54 AM

He pushed his way into her life
with a wolf whistle and a nod
that her black and blue ego
couldn’t pas by.
With wedding banded permission,
handcuffs and a gag
he pushed her under
control, or so he thought until the

day he found her hanging in the corner.
Four walls caged the maddened creature.
Scarlet eyes and a red violin belly
made him fear keeping her
but even more so, he feared

her escape.  Warily he backed away
giving room for her downward climb.
His all consuming need to mate with her
overrode all caution and once down
he quickly pushed her to the bed,
forcing his way inside.  The beauty

was finally his.  Now if only he could push
away the memory of her eyes.
They haunted his light,
they haunted his darkness.
Nightmares pushed him
to the edge, and still he pushed

until he thought she cried
for more, and she did
but not for him, she cried
for the one before,
the one she left for the sake
of love. She never forgot.
She never forgave-she wasn’t with him
when he
died.

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2001-04-09 12:01 PM

WHEW!!! This so surreal and haunting and just makes me shudder. The emotion really just transcended the screen just now. I am deeply moved, jb. e ya later. wow.

Brad Majors

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since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

2 posted 2001-04-09 12:03 PM

Amazing! I love your style

The imagery is haunting!

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

3 posted 2001-04-09 12:30 PM

Aw, hon... this one packs too much truth to be anything but heartbreak written through a pen of pain. But yanno what? I'm still cheering for the prisoner (hairy though her legs might be *EG*) ... especially since black widow spiders are not without weapons of their own? *S*

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

4 posted 2001-04-09 01:07 PM

indeed the widow destiny has many weapons. . .

powerful writing. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

5 posted 2001-04-10 09:37 AM

thanks s...this one started out different in my mind and just sort of took on a life of its own...

brad, thank you

suthern...yeah...lady but then you know me all too well...hairy spider legs and all *g*
thanks lady

sven..thank you...much...

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

6 posted 2001-04-11 12:09 PM

day he found her hanging in the corner.
Four walls caged the maddened creature.
Scarlet eyes and a red violin belly
made him fear keeping her
but even more so, he feared
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~WHOA & Whew~
those are some poetic buttkickin images girlie ... man oh man...
very cool writing and employ of metaphor here JB
this one will linger for awhile...you can bet on it.

baby, dont you work so hard for this prize you found ...
it will all be gone when you turn around ...
cuz, nothing lasts forever anyway ...

thecraig
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since 2001-03-11

Posts 223

7 posted 2001-04-11 05:38 AM

Hauntingly horrific.I guess her days at home while he is at work are a rest, wow when he gets fired she may regret setting her first botfriend up then to? I guess anything else she finds to mundane.

jellybeans
Member Elite

since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

8 posted 2001-04-12 02:55 PM

thank you jm, I know mine are not usually very happy, but this one went way out there, que no?

thanks craig

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