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Dark Kisses
Member

since 2001-06-24

Posts 364
Flat lands of Kansas

0 posted 2001-07-25 12:45 PM

Okay this one is kinda long!! But its something I really needed to get out.
Sort of my finally plea for forgiveness.
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We had made so many promises
In the letters that we wrote
So many I love you's and I do's
Making my butterflies float
We promised to always talk
To communicate in every way
Never going to bed mad
With the nasty things we say
We promised to always be there
And to hold each other tight
Never letting the world get us down
Always staying within each other's sight
We promised to love one another
From the bottom of our hearts
Never really talking about the time
That we could possible part
We promised to to always be there
Wiping each other's tears
Holding the other one up
When all we felt was our fears
We promised to never hurt the other
Or turn our backs on them
Never to block out the sun
Or let the lights go dim
We promised all of this
Yet here I sit today
Writing this in past tense
Because I know of no other way

For the fact is .....

I still love you
And think of you each day
I want to wake each morning
With you smiling my way
I want to hold you so close
When the days get rough
Help you build your future
Knowing it can be tough
I want you to know my love
Is only made for you
You are my soulmate forever
And this I know is true
I want to sit next to you
For the rest of my life
Finish out our plans
Of me becoming your wife

(almost finished) .......

So I sit here today
And please believe what I say
My feelings are so true
And I promise I will do
All the promises I have made
Will never again fade
I leave the end to you
Please do as you choose
Just give me another chance
And our hearts can once again dance

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Okay tell me if it is expressed well enough.
Can you feel the love I truely have for him?
If not, please put in a welcomed helping hand!
I need this to be perfect before he see's it

[This message has been edited by Dark Kisses (edited 07-25-2001).]

BitterSmoke
Member

since 2001-01-02

Posts 54

1 posted 2001-07-25 03:07 AM

wow

qtpieelmo
Senior Member

since 2000-07-04

Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY

2 posted 2001-07-25 08:18 AM

Long...but beautiful

LOVE ELMO <3

Scarlet Lady
Member

since 2000-02-11

Posts 242
Midwest

3 posted 2001-07-25 09:53 AM

Mags.... it could not of been said better in my opinion. Straight from your heart with vulnerability (which I know can be hard to show). I felt you let it all go in your write, and let him see into your heart with bare nakedness. How could he not feel the love? It is perfect! I loved it!

Dark Kisses
Member

since 2001-06-24

Posts 364
Flat lands of Kansas

4 posted 2001-07-25 10:29 AM

Thanks everyone! I just really need this man to be able to look within my heart and soul and see my love. So my final plea must be able to do just that.

Thanks again,
Mags

Dark Poet
Member

since 2001-07-22

Posts 99
North Carolina, USA

5 posted 2001-07-25 11:59 AM

When hearts dance, boundries fall. I enjoyed it and wish you luck with the one you need so deeply.

James

Hellseyes
Member

since 2001-07-25

Posts 120
Kansas, USA

6 posted 2001-07-26 11:05 AM

i agree this could not have been expressed better, and you said what came to heart, thats what really matters../Drew/

taramw
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 738

7 posted 2001-07-28 08:36 AM

I truly loved this poem of yours... it spoke so much of what is in your heart. It nearly made me cry... in fact, another brandy and it would've!! *wink* Isn't it sad how things go sometimes. *sigh*. Take loads of care.

~ Tara ~

Constance
Member

since 2001-07-28

Posts 393
Ohio

8 posted 2001-07-28 01:23 PM

I enjoyed reading your poem. Remember, you know him best---and you know the best words to touch his heart.

Jessica

Member

since 2001-06-28

Posts 350
South AL

9 posted 2001-07-31 02:44 AM

Wonderful write here

I liked it very much.

What don't kill you can only make you stronger...

Love you, Adam!! :)

illusion
Member

since 2001-06-19

Posts 296

10 posted 2001-07-31 10:25 AM

I think you expressed your feelings very well and hope things work out for you.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2001-08-04 08:37 AM

If it's from your heart then it is perfect...who else could express these feelings except you...and you definately deserve another chance...everyone does...James

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

12 posted 2001-09-01 02:59 PM

When it's real ... it's real
Never be afraid to give the real for in the end thats all we ever had.....

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