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dastard
Member

since 2001-07-14

Posts 55
in tearing silence

0 posted 2001-07-18 08:56 AM

Unreturned love could destroy us both
it burns our souls, bodies are clothes
destroyed inside the corpse will fall
will never move, not even crawl
love can be both wealth and plague
could make you bloom, could make you fake
but oneway-love is different, see?
it only costs one casualty

"Let me light my lamp, says the star and doesn't ask for long, if it helps to remove the darkness"
~free translation, Honey

Inanothertime
Member

since 2001-06-29

Posts 72

1 posted 2001-07-18 09:07 AM

I liked this--hope the next corner you turn,is unto a two-way street.

One
New Member

since 2001-06-21

Posts 7

2 posted 2001-07-18 05:58 PM

Possibly harsh, but does anybody look to the future and what they can make of it? I don't want to be the person that is crucified for saying this, but do you think that we should be not just be writing about what is and what has been but what could be?

Be it idealistic but I'd love to see someone pushing through an ideal, be it surreal or plain english, I'd love to see some poetry that is truly expressive, not just a release from the tensions of life.

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

3 posted 2001-07-18 08:55 PM

Then why don't you write such a poem One?

Dastard...what you say is true enough...it's also inevitable; it's a part of life.

Liked it.

K

Jeen
Member

since 2000-06-07

Posts 91

4 posted 2001-07-18 11:33 PM

Dastard

Just wanted to say hi. I'm kind of a new member (I haven't posted much although I've registered lasr year.)

I didn't think it was "depressing stuff" and I liked the ending.

Jeen

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

5 posted 2001-10-29 01:15 AM

OI!!!....

*Appluds*

this is awesome..took my breath away..it really did custard. its in my library for ever and ever and ever...

keep writing, poet...

"......",said the wise mute.

JT
Member

since 2001-09-28

Posts 69
Arkansas, USA

6 posted 2001-10-29 05:08 PM

That really is good. Really well written. This will be in some college poetry textbook someday.

JT

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