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moshpit
Member

since 1999-11-25

Posts 143
cebu, philippines

0 posted 2001-06-01 07:17 PM

I dreamt of you once
In that year I did nothing.
Standing--a silhouette--
With your hair--longer
Than I remember.
And your trembling fingers
Causing little earthquakes
When they hit those keys.
What did you mean?
"Under the pink".. skies?
Oceans? tears?
Fears
And emotions dance
Since you no longer are,
Unlike me,
Silent all these years.

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

1 posted 2001-06-01 10:44 PM

Moshpit - I LOVE THIS POEM.

I really do...

'And your trembling fingers
Causing little earthquakes
When they hit those keys.
What did you mean?'

Fantastic imagery here...well done!

K

Jamie
Member Elite

since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

2 posted 2001-06-02 12:57 PM

[quote] Love this line esp.
Since you no longer are,
Unlike me,
Silent all these years.

take care,
jamie

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

Elizabeth Cor
Senior Member

since 2000-10-13

Posts 879
Over the river and through the woods

3 posted 2001-06-02 02:41 AM

Isn't she amazing? Wondering if your silence was the sort spoken of in Silent All These Years... if so, THANK GOD you are out of that situation, and the second, individual brutality of a smothered identity.

Luck&Love, mosh.
~Beth

moshpit
Member

since 1999-11-25

Posts 143
cebu, philippines

4 posted 2001-06-02 03:27 AM

i went to a friend's house and she had tori amos playing on her cd player.. i begged but she wouldn't let borrow the cd.. i know it's kinda pathetic but tori's first 2 cds are very, very rare in my place.. i couldn't get the song out of my head.. i ended up writing something about it..

allis4angel
Member

since 2001-04-10

Posts 82
Portugal

5 posted 2001-06-02 09:29 AM

Very nice.
Congratulations

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

6 posted 2001-06-02 09:50 AM

yes, a very nice poem..*s

~Wynter..has me thinking

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

7 posted 2001-06-03 09:19 AM

Moshpit,
it just goes to show you "silence is not always golden". I enjoyed this poem despite the sadness threaded through it.
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.

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