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The Redundancy Waltz
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The Redundancy Waltz |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Ah yes, the pied piper of men one who plays deceptive song in sacred places, with eyes aglow with endless hunger~ in essence, a siren Tell me, did you feel it? do you still crave it? & do you hate me for it? a fresh, yet bitter memory dressed in black and oh... how you wear it A weapon for your tongue like sour wine, bitter-sweet at this banquet of destruction While the symphony rises on a note of hysteria you feebly attempt to control the impossible, Me... -Tier{R.T.} 4/01 [This message has been edited by Tiersdin (edited 04-15-2001).] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hey there, I really liked your poem...nice tension. Just want to point out that feebley needs to be spelled as 'feebly.'  KAll obscurity starts with a danger: |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
*chuckles* thanks, Servern, I guess I should have spell checked! -Tier [This message has been edited by Tiersdin (edited 04-15-2001).] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I enjoyed this...and have felt this way myself.  |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Sometimes a "banquet of destruction", is the only way to describe it. I love that analogy. Great poem, Tiersdin. Thanks.  "I hate quotes, they suck!" I.G. Norance [This message has been edited by coyote (edited 04-15-2001).] |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
wow,this is really strong,reminds me of events in my own life,i really enjoyed this peice,it was kind of a sorrowful revenge,well written!! samantha¤ |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Coyote, I agree! thank you for reading and commenting! *smiles* Poet DeVine, & Swamp Fairie, I think as poets of the feminine persausion, we speak a language that communicates one to the other. It is not surprising at all that you've experienced these things or can relate to them. I couldn't tell you how many poems I've read that felt were written for me or about me. Thank you lots for reading and commenting! *hugs* -Tier |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
I am a new member here and I have looked at many poems and they did not impress me but this poem changed my mind - excellent! Truly appreciative ^*~Kicking Kim~*^ [This message has been edited by Kicking Kim (edited 04-17-2001).] |
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