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shadydaze
Member

since 2000-10-02

Posts 85

0 posted 2001-04-10 04:16 PM

The love
and affection;
unfound.

The pain
and the strife
abound.

The fear
and the worry;
unending.

The smiles
and the laughter:
pretending.

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

1 posted 2001-04-10 05:55 PM

Shady,
this is so great, the way you encapsulated such wisdom in so few words.
write on
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.

dragonpoe
Senior Member

since 2000-11-12

Posts 608
Palm Bay, Florida

2 posted 2001-04-12 05:22 PM

Wonderful write here, Shady. Absolutely powerful and a great read.

With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

dragonpoe
Senior Member

since 2000-11-12

Posts 608
Palm Bay, Florida

3 posted 2001-04-12 05:24 PM

Wonderful write here, Shady. Absolutely powerful and a great read.

With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

4 posted 2001-04-17 01:58 AM

Very powerful piece in it's simplicity. Nicely done!!

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

5 posted 2001-04-17 02:14 AM

this is very true in my opinion its a life story of me. its very powerful as in being short which i liked more... thanks for sharing.
keep writing

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 04-17-2001).]

Kicking Kim
Member

since 2001-04-16

Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!

6 posted 2001-04-17 12:09 PM

This is a beautiful poem and I like the way that you can depict particular meanings from the poem, some lines have great significance and you have got lots of them in this poem

Truly appreciative
^*~Kicking Kim~*^

Temptress

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

7 posted 2001-04-18 06:20 PM

Nice work here. I suppose we all have to pretend from time to time, right?

still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d
I am bound by this, you see...to become Night's sole mistress, and I am jealous in my endeavours for his attention.

baerlon
Member

since 2000-01-14

Posts 197
Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA

8 posted 2001-04-20 03:25 AM

Sweetness!!! I loved the simplicity of this poem. I think you may have helped me kill some of my writers block. The poem was brillant.

There's a peace inside us all
Let it be your friend
It will help you carry on
In the end
There's a peace inside us all
-Creed

Godsend_1
Member

since 2001-04-19

Posts 247
great state of illinois

9 posted 2001-04-21 04:20 AM

wow that was like so deep and so simple i really enjoyed it it pours out a ton while saying do little that is a great skill keep it up

i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it

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