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Choke The Flower
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Choke The Flower |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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Choke The Flower  Take advantage of a rose in remorse change the destiny of it's course, fill earthen soil with lightning shower watch it drown, choke the flower, provoke the quicksand of dirt beneath it to swallow it's pride, force it to submit, burn it's heart in the sting of the sun rip it's petals off, one by one, dull it's fragrance, kick it when it's down off to the garden's ball in blood-death gown, enforce polluted air to warp it with deadly kiss penetrating it's layers with acid breath of darkness, stomp on it's fragility with steel-toed shoe turn it's passion red into sorrow blue, silence the melody within it's newborn throat scratch and scrape it's scarlet velvet coat, capture it's glow, sell it to a star slash it's stem, like the butcher you are, dig up the seeds of it's spirit in savage rage erase the ink in the book of it's soul, scar each page, snap it's spine, as it bows down in defeat paint upon it your bitter, replacing it's sweet, summon the heavy snows to envelop the screaming rose, attacking it with frost bite in the pale of demon twilight, steal it's tranquil memories leave it with amnesia, infested with disease, marked with tatooes of sores, never to fade destroy this angel beauty with rusted razor blade, rub corrosive salt into the weeping wounds, strangle it's gasp, alone with tainted tears... entombed, revive it's heartbeat once hope is slayed deformed with tattered skin and fantasies frayed, choke the drooping flower let it's leaves dry sour, replace it's purity with deepest sin laugh as it disintegrates in the howl of wind, abandon the rose, a victim for desert storms parched and sterile, arid in dementia with only the thorns ~*By Melissa Honeybee*~ [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 04-08-2001).] |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Hey Melissa! This is brilliant hon, so descriptive, the analgies etc. A gem, a rose amongst the thorns!  Good work *War produces one thing - Cemetaries. And in cemetaries there are no enemies!* |
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svandersaar Junior Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 40 |
Graphic! All that pain, anger, & angst! I really felt this one; but maybe that's because I work in a flower shop.  Stacey |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
this is great Melissa!! I think this is going to be one of my favorites of yours....i love it!! sammi much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Melissa, you always have so many images in your work and this was exceptional, an emotional roller coaster write. write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Very strong feelings here. Venting them like this is a good thing, even on "cyberpaper", it helps. And you did it so beautifully! Thanks. "I hate quotes, they suck!" |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Ouch, this one made me wince in pain a few times, though not because of bad writing. You must have had a headache when you were done this one, so much harsh emotions! Wow, I don't know if I'd survive writing something this deep. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Help, I can't breathe............oh, I loved this....... Kathleen Blake |
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Chelsea~ Member
since 2001-02-09
Posts 260Ontario, CANADA |
missy, this is so raw of intense pain, how do you do it? |
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mauddib Member
since 2002-01-12
Posts 119melbourne australia |
A rose by no other name........ This one fell among the rocks orphaned from the crop in the harvest of pain it stood in defiance a bleeding beauty to teach first aid |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
I simply Love it! Thank You |
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Secret Whisper Member
since 2001-01-25
Posts 298Through the Looking Glass |
This is one of the most painful pieces I have ever had to read. WONDERFUL! It was so descriptive and allegoric that I was overcome by it! Kudos. Quod me nutrit me destruit. |
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angel girl Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 322within a whisper... |
Very nice, very heartfelt. "What makes letting go hard isn't losing what you had, but losing the dream of what could have been." |
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