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amyX Junior Member
since 2001-04-02
Posts 32 |
clean floors waxed and waiting for blemishes to appear imprints following paths wandered to idle backdoor hallways where i find you among the cardboard boxes waiting to be recycled a nicotine fix and a devil's grin when you ain't so ready to by my windows looking for light a turbine engine on overload running down empty aisles to blemish the skin of a memory walking this way too easily cleaned on shiny checkerboard floors |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
amyX ... very original tone in this poem with a current voice ... welcome. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Welcome to Passions. Great job on this poem. It has a great flow. Nice job. --Marie It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Welcome to passions, what a strong poetic voice you have and I like your images. write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Hello and welcome, great entry! This does indeed have a unique, individual taste to it and it's a pleasure to read. Hope to see more.  With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Great style here! Welcome to Passions - please check your email for a special welcome..  KAll obscurity starts with a danger: |
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Skoota Junior Member
since 2000-12-23
Posts 28Australia |
Welcome to the Dark Side of Passions. I hope you enjoy yourself. I'm one of the not so successful members of this site. Poetry comes randomly to me. I hope you aren't cursed this way. Live Poetry Breath Poetry Be Poetry Simon Come to me |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
this is very very good,course i have an undue fondness for checkerboard floors which seems to stem from multiple readings of Through the Looking Glass...lol..but really this is well written,i love the image that i got out of it,the image of someone sitting among cardboard boxes awaiting being thrown out with the trash or recycled...great read!! sammi much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson |
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amyX Junior Member
since 2001-04-02
Posts 32 |
thank you all. i am looking for a place where i am not lost let's see if i can find myself |
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Adamly Junior Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 11Canada |
Nice peom. Held a new yet different meaning to me. Liked the style as well In life things come and go. Live and die. Prosper and fall. But our love and poetry will always carry on. |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
"a turbine engine on overload running down empty aisles" Excellent sight and sound imagery here. I loved the whole piece though. Great first post! Thanks. "I hate quotes, they suck!" |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Welcome to Passions, Amy...what an entrance you made with this poem! A phenomenal poem, powerful, clever, and deep! Take care, Melissa~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
hey I loved this, love your style Great imagery as well Maree |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
An excellent poem. The tone, structure and language were all perfect! Very well done!! Keep writing! ^*~KickingKim~*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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zarina Member
since 2001-05-19
Posts 180 |
I liked your poem. It was really good. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done! Welcome to Passions! I really liked this poem. I hope to see you post more in the future. The poem you wrote just now really hit me..right here *points*...It was really well written. Hope to see more.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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poni Junior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 21Nebraska |
tasty poem...lots to chew on...smiles |
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