Always What You Never Said

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

blackhalo
Member

since 2000-02-15

Posts 467
Denver, CO

0 posted 2003-08-20 01:39 PM

I'm only waiting
For the flame to consume
What's left of my fate
But impending doom

I can only see
What makes people feel
And the tears in their eyes
When the pain is too real

I write my words slowly
With the hate at the end
Filled with dead silence
Searching for a friend

I know that you feel me
In your soul, not your mind
And you touch me so slowly
Pretend to be kind

I miss you, you know that
But you'll always have her
To shelter you from
My treacherous world

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

1 posted 2003-08-21 04:32 AM

How did this almost leave the posting page without a response. This is very nice indeed and seems heartfelt. Enjoyed.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

2 posted 2003-08-21 09:27 AM

Nice write

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

SharaRose
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~

3 posted 2003-08-21 11:05 AM

So sad. I could feel this pain. :'(

SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

blackhalo
Member

since 2000-02-15

Posts 467
Denver, CO

4 posted 2003-08-22 12:29 PM

Pain, yes... Anyway... Beyond that point all is numb. Thanks for the replies guys. And green_itcy_stuff for saving it from the dogpile.
~Alicia

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

5 posted 2003-08-22 05:23 PM

i dont know how i missed this one alicia, good write, really good, so much emotion and passion...adding this

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

Mad_Hatter
Member

since 2003-06-29

Posts 393
Canada

6 posted 2003-08-22 06:45 PM

It is indeed sad. I loved this poem. Great write...great write indeed.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

7 posted 2003-08-23 12:07 PM

I decided to have another go at it. Nice write. And as far as saving it, the pleasure was all mine! Addition.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

blackhalo
Member

since 2000-02-15

Posts 467
Denver, CO

8 posted 2003-08-23 01:30 AM

Glad everyone enjoyed it. It's great to be writing again... I have sporadic writer's block. It attacks when I have the best inspiration points in front of me. :p
Anyway...
Thanks again guys,
Much appreciated.
~Alicia

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

9 posted 2003-08-23 03:14 AM

Ahh, I'm feelin' this one..

exhale
Senior Member

since 2003-06-13

Posts 646
Alberta,Canada

10 posted 2003-08-23 03:31 AM

I know that you feel me
In your soul, not your mind
And you touch me so slowly
Pretend to be kind

this was incredible,great great write

blackhalo
Member

since 2000-02-15

Posts 467
Denver, CO

11 posted 2003-08-23 01:58 PM

Kaoru and exhale,
Thanks so much for taking the time to read and respond. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

12 posted 2003-08-23 02:10 PM

Alicia - I am unsure of the inspiration of this write, but I do understand this:

I can only see
What makes people feel
And the tears in their eyes
When the pain is too real

Reminds me of "Comfortably Numb" by Pink Floyd. It comes and goes, you know?
nice job
xxoo

teenpoet
Member

since 2001-10-17

Posts 280
Michigan

13 posted 2003-09-04 10:02 AM

Very nicely writ and I can feel the pain. And I understand a little. you're interesting. Besides the fact that you share my namesake I think you may have other things in common with me. But what....?

I don't know what I did wrong but the fae are after me now. Faeries can be so irritable.

Rosebud1229
Senior Member

since 2000-04-05

Posts 1813
North Carolina

14 posted 2003-09-04 11:20 PM

very nice poem, I like the way it opened up the heart, as well as the soul,

Endlessecho
Member

since 2003-09-05

Posts 398
I live within myself

15 posted 2003-09-09 09:10 AM

Great write. Very relatable feelings. You presented them so captivatingly!

Eromyna
Member

since 2002-11-29

Posts 306
Pheonix, AZ, USA

16 posted 2003-09-09 12:08 PM

Beautiful.

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

ShannonMarie
Member

since 2003-09-09

Posts 55
in a state of being

17 posted 2003-09-10 10:23 PM

beautiful, good write

Moon Dust

Member Elite

since 1999-06-11

Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK

18 posted 2003-09-11 08:21 PM

u too hey? nice write tho, dark just the way i like it

If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come?

froggy
Senior Member

since 2003-06-23

Posts 1893
Michigan

19 posted 2003-09-11 08:40 PM

I really like this blackhalo.

:-)

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.