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Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

0 posted 2003-07-29 09:30 PM

I have a decision to make.
except I don't know what I'm deciding between.
Questions formed in steady doses.
Answers shy away,
A shinning light in an empty room.
Taunting me with their many locks.
I'm just so lost.
I have a reason to live,
but I don't know what it is.
Dont tell me what to believe..
I'm deciding between...
My life changes in this moment..
When I become
something other then mindless.
Thinking for myself.
The fires in my eyes..
I'm blazing my own path.
I'm terrified.
Wondering what I'll lose,
wondering what I'll gain.
My tears don't taste the same.
theres something inhuman about the substance.
A callased look into the mirror reveals:
A bleeding girl.
Food tastes like mud.
Sleep feels like death.
What have I become?

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

1 posted 2003-07-30 02:12 PM

It sounds to me like you've died.

I enjoyed this. Its like the character in the story had a life decision to make and made the wrong one.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

Lexia
Member

since 2003-07-20

Posts 111
Nowhere

2 posted 2003-07-30 09:55 PM

Well, wow. I thoroughly enjoyed this. It makes me wonder some, but that's a good thing.

Lex

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

3 posted 2003-07-30 09:56 PM

Wonder about what? If I may inquire?
~Lex

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

4 posted 2003-07-30 10:48 PM

i do like this, i dont think you have died, just in your mind(sorry greeny, don't mean to downplay you at all)

"Dont tell me what to believe..
I'm deciding between...
My life changes in this moment..
When I become
something other then mindless."

been there baby, still am...
nice write...

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

5 posted 2003-07-30 11:04 PM

yeah. well everythings in my head, so it makes sense that thats where I would die. haha....I think. ok, well thanks.
~Lex

Mad_Hatter
Member

since 2003-06-29

Posts 393
Canada

6 posted 2003-07-31 12:30 PM

For me, this poem was clearly about suicide and so often people are blamed for commiting suicide, we chose to focuss on the fact that a person did it, instead of why they did it. Nicely done.

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