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another poetic(or rather unpoetic) bit of rubbish from the scribble book |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
¤Dark Lullaby¤ Well the curtain is closing, but her eyes are still open. Watching my lipstick swirl down the drain, these are soft memoried droplets of rain. Don't let the string roll away. Headlessly,heedlessly,needlessly heading the way, away from the self aurevoir, please roll the string away.... With slime covered feet, second skin of the street, as she walks to quick for the cat to be tricked. And mirror glassed eyes gaze out, at the points of nothing, points of the ball...of string rolled away. What do you do, when you've got a clue and your ball of string has slithered away? By the grace of the younger you call it down. And paint her town yellow and green. I've tied it up with my ball of string It's a chain of beads to long To long to be gone. With ribbons and bows, i tied up the crows. With wonder i watched them fall, i tied up the little girl's mind, i tied up with string, the thing that little girls know, with ribbons and bows. How creased are your elbows!! How right are your hands? how heavy your body. And no one understands. Hot pink and the purple have vanished, but don't roll the string away. A bohemian poet, a feather that floweth, down past her window... lullabye,goodbye, i'll sing you gone. Do i contradict myself?Very well i contradict myself.I contain multitudes.~walt whitman |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Wow! Unpoetic?!!! Nope. This is fantastic!  Loved the images in this... the contrasts... it read along rather nicely... I loved it! Take care!~ Tara ~ may you live all the days of your life. -- jonathan swift |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
thanks tara=] you're so nice... btw,an interesting thing....in the middle ages a ball of string was called a clew,the connection between clue and a ball of string is...the legend of theseus and the minotaur in greek mytology,where he goes into the labrynth and slays the minotaur?? He used a ball of string...therefore he "had a clue"...get it?? isn't that great?? lol i think that's so neat.So when you're using the phrase"haven't got a clue" you could be saying,i haven't got a ball of string!! lol sam¤ Do i contradict myself?Very well i contradict myself.I contain multitudes.~walt whitman |
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wandering Member
since 2001-01-21
Posts 92 |
great stuff here,,,enjoyed it too |
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NC Member
since 2001-02-20
Posts 89 |
very unique ideas and images i'm afraid i "didn't have a ball of string" for some parts of this until i read your comments above but i love the poems that make me think...enjoyed very much |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Swamp Faeryie, Now here's a poem that I brought my own ball of string to see me through the maze. I loved the swirling, twisting write of it, now all I need is to change my name Gretel or Hansel perhaps.  write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
this was great! I loved the images and the way that the poem flows in a twisting sort of way. great job!  |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
Once again i am overwhelmed!! Thank you all so much,gee you guys are nice swampie sam |
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laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
This is a mystical, musical romp! Makes a fun read, but also holds some fascinating glimpses.....nice work, Sam! Lary |
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Temptress*Moon Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 240Long Island, NY |
WOW! This was some read*S* Very interesting,different But i LOVED it Temptress*Moon I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH- |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
ooooh thank you lary and temptress!! =]Very nice of you sammi much madness is divinest sense~Emily Dickinson |
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mystic requiem Member
since 2001-01-26
Posts 144 |
rubbish???? I think NOT! Pure genius comes when we let our minds flow. You have talent! *soar on*   |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
This was exceptional in my opinion. Sometimes those scribblings are the best things we have! |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
you guys are weird........lol..but then so am i,thank you lots,mega esteem boost I thank you for your kindnessmuch madness is divinest sense~Emily Dickinson |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
interesting scribble (we should all be so lucky) ... nice. |
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