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Dark Poetry #3

I'm sorry

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

0 posted 2002-09-02 03:19 AM

thoughts are round
torso-slash
limbs the width
of a
crayon

what else could a stickfigure
right?

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2002-09-02 12:39 PM

not sorry, but honest, with the wisdom of a child, bri...

devina
Member Elite

since 1999-10-28

Posts 3539
Cali

2 posted 2002-09-02 06:52 PM

the size? does not extend to honesty sweet one...

(got an evil thought right there- but I'm sure you know devious me by now.)

shall we trade hugs??? Hell...I'm in!!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

[This message has been edited by devina (09-03-2002 09:09 PM).]

Dragon Mistress
Member

since 2002-08-26

Posts 289
Washington, USA.

3 posted 2002-09-02 09:04 PM

Hmm...interesting (or at least to me) but greatly enjoyed.
-Tanya

~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

4 posted 2002-09-03 12:02 PM

brian,
Love the reek of wax,
the oily paper,
the hobbled stick
figures.

Mike

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

5 posted 2002-09-03 09:02 PM

Thoughts wound round
crayon limbs
slash
  torso
    width
limned

Else, what a stick
  could figure right?

Alrighty, then. It looks kinda funny, all inside-out, an' aryting.

Sorry, brian
havin' a l'il J.J. jones.

~Ed

In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward".

~wranx~

leafseranade
Member

since 2001-07-06

Posts 118
Wisconsin, USA

6 posted 2002-09-04 01:10 PM

Yeah! I love your style in this poem! So much to be read into, yet even without analyzing this piece, it speaks forthwright..it's just..there. Good job!

[This message has been edited by leafseranade (09-04-2002 01:11 PM).]

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