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Dark Poetry #3

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laryalee
Member

since 2000-06-19

Posts 352
Alberta, Canada

0 posted 2001-02-02 06:29 PM

What happens...

When ends have no beginnings,
circles feed upon themselves,
and orbits fail?
When words no longer form,
imprisoned thoughts beat endless drums
to no avail?

When sand has swallowed water,
light has tunnelled into sand,
and sand is dust?
When death itself is starving
because birth can never reach
its final thrust?

What happens then?

Or did we exist at all?

fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

1 posted 2001-02-02 07:49 PM

Fascinating! Your subtle rhyming with the smaller lines is quite impressive. If I could offer any critique, it would be to add more rhyming.

Other than that, the poem is quite good, almost prophetic.

G. A. Webb
Member

since 2000-01-21

Posts 441
Stanton, California, USA

2 posted 2001-02-02 08:06 PM

No, we don't exist. This is all just a terrible dream, one from which we can never wake...LOL!

I liked this, thanks! :-)

G

Regret not that which you have done,
Rather that which you haven't

[This message has been edited by G. A. Webb (edited 02-02-2001).]

Swamp¤Faeryie
Member

since 2000-12-04

Posts 393
fairyland....of course;)

3 posted 2001-02-02 11:23 PM

wonderful cocept,this is packed with wit,ver very clevr,and quite profound,well written,perfect words,what more can i say?? it's just perfect.

swampo

Do i contradict myself?Very well i contradict myself.I contain multitudes.~walt whitman

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