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laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
Beneath the harness lay the yoke, attaching burdens yet to come. Beneath the sermon lay the joke - celestial wisdom, human tongue. The seed was smothered, cages built; potential vigor drained from birth. The winds of ritual scattered guilt; usurped the nourishment of earth. Beneath the surface roots succumbed; the stalk turned brittle then it broke. * * * (Haunting memories of a strict childhood) [This message has been edited by laryalee (edited 02-01-2001).] |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
You really do express yourself well. This sure doesn't sound like the true message you were meant to hear, His Yoke Is Easy and His Burden Is Light. Sorry, this sounds so sad, hope you are overcoming, the harness bruises. [This message has been edited by Songbird (edited 02-02-2001).] |
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laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
Songbird, thank you - it's a long road....I'm getting there slowly, and the writing helps. Memories of my mother 'beating the devil out of me' cannot be erased, but I don't think God is like that, especially with children. Lary |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Ah,...ok, I'm back again. Really drawn to the way you write. Your choice and use of words is superb. Edgy, cold and so real. I felt this. Take care of yourself and keep writing, I'll be looking for more when I'm around. *Peace. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
This is the kind of thing that makes me write that stuff that gets so many religious people angry, even though I am religious. Your poem reminds me of that parable in the New Testament, of the seeds that are sewn on the ground. You know what the saddest part of religion is? It's usually the religious people who turn people off from God or whoever is responsible for creating this thing we call the Universe. |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
WOW that was excellent,the first stanza is exquisitely written,you are very talented,i really liked this one!! samantha Do i contradict myself?Very well i contradict myself.I contain multitudes.~walt whitman |
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laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
Thanks Spitfire, glad you liked it - went to visit your work - Nice! 007 - I agree - when you think of how many wars have been (still are) being fought over religion - makes one wonder. BTW, I went to see your posts - stopped in at Philosophy 101 re Existence - I'll be posting a poem you may enjoy *g*. Swamp Faeryie - thank you so much for your comments - I'll be looking for you around the boards! Appreciation all around! Lary |
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