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Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2002-06-28 02:41 AM

Emotions running on an escalator
Eyes full of despair
An empty tank, without a drop of hope
My body wants to come to a halt
Momentarily coming to a stop
Panic pierces my skin with an icing sound
Ttssssss………
Oxygen no longer a luxury
The scent of death creeping on the edge of my hair tips
Starting to inhale a lost connection
Fingers tremble as they wobble towards my face
My eyes pass through the curtains of death
My Grandfather is dead
My heart shudders
Death has taken me without notice
Relinquish my pain
I am forever abandoned

[This message has been edited by Tomer (06-29-2002 12:29 PM).]

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

1 posted 2002-06-28 03:18 AM

:( Beautifully sad and heartfelt, Tomer. I enjoyed yr work.

These smiling eyes are just a mirror for the sun.
-RHCP

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (06-28-2002 03:19 AM).]

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

2 posted 2002-06-28 09:02 PM

Welcome Tomer...if this is autobiographical, then let me extend sympathy for your loss...

On a poetical level - I like it, a lot..

K

teenpoet
Member

since 2001-10-17

Posts 280
Michigan

3 posted 2003-05-05 11:13 AM

Very very good, and sad. Sorry about your loss. I think your a very good poet and I hope you keep writing if only to show me how well I should write. Good job.

~Keep dreaming~

RavenEye
Junior Member

since 2003-05-02

Posts 29
Ohio, USA

4 posted 2003-05-05 03:51 PM

Hi Tomer,

Emotional, heart wrenching and beautifully written!! I feel the pain of your loss. Keep faith!

Bye,

RavenEye

Keep faith, hold your dreams in your palm of your hand as you reach for your goals!

Temptress

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

5 posted 2003-05-06 12:10 PM

Tomer,
I received your e-mail in regards to this poem, but when I sent a reply, the e-mail bounced. Do you, perhaps, have another e-mail address where I can contact you?

You could hurt me with your bare hands. You could hurt me using the sharp edge of what you say. JEWEL

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

6 posted 2003-05-06 02:50 PM

Thank you all for your beautiful responses, I have since moved on. Yes Temptress, you can reach me at Tfried420@aol.com. Thanx again.

Tomer

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