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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
i laugh through my teeth and see through glass, like a spider in a vase. Washroom white and cornflower blue, it's so depressing staring at you. Black boots like Stevie Nicks stumbling is how i get my kicks. Trip down yellow hallways, count and curse the days. Calculator button pushers, vegas neon flashers and you expect me to rise to the occasion you try to fix me with delicate persuasion. Yes,you glue me up,call me fixed and award me a wreath for running the race. Do i contradict myself?Very well i contradict myself.I contain multitudes.~walt whitman |
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mystic requiem Member
since 2001-01-26
Posts 144 |
Simply great writing. I enjoyed the depth of it. *thanx*   mYsTiC |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Faeyrie, Interesting. Puzzling, tho. Awaiting the passage of some unpleasantless it seems. ? |
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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road |
This is splendid, nice to see the new directions your muse is taking you Swampie...  |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
Thank you mystic,and krawdad,yes now thinking about it i beleive this poem is about waiting for the end of something unpleasant,even though that's not really what i had in mind while writing it.And thank you allan  ¤samantha¤ Do i contradict myself?Very well i contradict myself.I contain multitudes.~walt whitman |
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laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
Really neat scenes here... "the spider in a vase".... "you glue me up, call me fixed and award me a wreath for running the race." A sense of helplessness permeates...happens to all of us, sometime. Very enjoyable! Lary |
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wandering Member
since 2001-01-21
Posts 92 |
a great read...enjoy your insight...thanks for the read lost in thought, found in words. wanderer |
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mystic requiem Member
since 2001-01-26
Posts 144 |
Ahhhhhh yessss....here I am searching through the pages for your work. And why you may ask? Because I LIKE it! I've read this one before but who cares. Because I LIKE it! You are talented. That's no lie. May i make a suggestion on this piece that might ZAP'em good? Instead of yellow hallways... call them...yellow brickroads. Think about it. Fabulous piece none the less. *thanx*  |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
ooooh mystic!!!!!! great idea!! On that line i was thinking of my school days,and how the halls were painted such a silent supposedly calm color,yellow brickroads,that seems almost to fit better because the walls were nasty concrete bricks,plus when waiting for the busses to arrive they often popped wizard of oz or something in the vcr.....very interesting,this suggestion stuff is awesome!! yellow brick...has so much more pizazz doesn't it?? THANK YOU THANK YOU!!!!! sammi much madness is divinest sense~Emily Dickinson |
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