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Letting Go |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind 
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Letting go... What an easy thing to say. However how hard we all tried To be removed from stinks. Time... Is the way it should be. However how comfort that might sound How often a piece of glasses Bring back the thorns to the heart. Reconcile with my thoughts, Knowing time for leave Is better than fancy. Lizzy http://poets2000.com/lizzyvivian/ ~The first two cup of tea is to throw away; what remains is the best of all. |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Thought I might try helping you with your wording on this one..If you don't like what I did to it.. It won't bother me. Letting go... What an easy thing to say. However hard we try To be removed from fowl air Time... Is the way it should be. However comforting that might sound How often pieces of glass Bring thorns to the heart. Reconciling my thoughts, Knowing the time for leave Is better than fancy. |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
Thanks! Your correction is good. I will humble accept it. You're welcome to critic any of my poems. It would be my pleasure. You critic with a soft voice and a warm tone which make you a very welcome and value guest. Love, Lizzy ~The first two cup of tea is to throw away; what remains is the best of all. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Sometimes letting go is like a little mini battle going on inside of us and sometimes it is easier then others...James |
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