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jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

0 posted 2001-10-28 09:41 PM

Crying Came Later

Iris-blue heart
wet-bathed in 'I told you so' tears
tripped by the crack between
love-hate ideas
trying to survive the mixed feelings
of freedom versus
'I don't want to go',
stumbles and falls -
crying came later;
passionate waves of emptiness
surrounded by flesh and blood -
desiccated remains of blessed love…
Shades of gray, darkest night,
can't see day for lack of light,
tortured heart's slowing beat,
Close my eyes…my eyes,
pray to sleep.

w. james beard, jr.
© august 2001

...not about me, my friends.

[This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 10-28-2001).]

Temptress

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

1 posted 2001-10-28 10:55 PM

Ahh..not about you, perhaps, but still very effective in its communication. I love this!

Sometimes the heart needs the solace of solitude and silence.

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

2 posted 2001-10-29 09:13 AM

Beautiful and glad it's not about you.
Sandra

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2001-10-29 02:00 PM

"Trying to survive the mixed feelings of freedom verses I don't want to go."
For some the choice seems easier then others..James

Immortal Beloved
Junior Member

since 2001-10-17

Posts 42
the carpathians

4 posted 2001-10-29 05:12 PM

"freedom versus
'I don't want to go',
stumbles and falls -..........
Shades of gray, darkest night,
can't see day for lack of light,
tortured heart's slowing beat,
Close my eyes…my eyes,
pray to sleep."

hmmm....these lines particularly drew me in,i relate i suppose. i like your choice of words and your crafting,good work.

ammelid¤

Fere libenter homines id quod volunt credunt~Julius Caesar

SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

5 posted 2001-10-31 10:12 AM

~J,...the title itself gives me one of those 'heart drops'. I was almost hesitant to open. But gosh, to read these words you've written, to have the feeling leap inside my chest and ache the way it has, just proves your skill is soaring. You have always 'spoken' to me through your writing. This one in particular, with it's wording and the distant, lonely tone, conveys such hurt, I sigh. *Peace friend, always.

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