Dark Poetry #3 |
Drain |
Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
this will when it tires of uncertain muffled voices. But don't underestimate the smolder beneath the cheerful sarcasm. Hate drips in shadows and falls unseen for the cover of a tenderness undiluted. The swirl of poison in a smile mixes well with lowered eyes and you are being consumed while you consume. Snake swallowing snake with delicious unhinged jaws as you drop into one another and lie without motion. Tame your lips and fire your gaze but nothing comes from anger but more anger. The swirl of poison in a smile mixes well with lowered eyes and falling from pedestal angels. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
I like, But, It sinks this will when it tires Doesn’t flow right for me, perhaps It sinks, this will when it tires Setting it off more And line breaks between those type lines Lower Lots of good images throughout Gloom [This message has been edited by Professor Gloom (edited 08-21-2001).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
quote: I'm not sure about that. . . perhaps from anger comes release. . .but. . . that's another thread. . . well done. . . let the emotion flow. . . -------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
The swirl of poison in a smile mixes well with lowered eyes and falling from pedestal angels nice lines... enjoyed the read and found the images quite strong... |
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Immortal Beloved Junior Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 42the carpathians |
i realize this is an older post,but i must express my appreciation. i enjoyed it very much!! ammelid Fere libenter homines id quod volunt credunt~Julius Caesar |
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