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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
You don't understand I want a regular relationship See if I need help on my homework Compliment me once in a while Surprise me! Would it be that hard? When we're out hold my hand Grab my arm when I'm about to trip And give me your famous smirk Because I smile when I see you smile And help me… Become un-scarred. *Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes* |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
In this poem, you've actually made it look like your guy doesn't care much on how you feel. Show him this poem, tell him how you feel.....If he truly cares for you, he'd heed your call  "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
A relationship thrives upon COMMUNICATION. Once that diminishes, then all you got is ......well......SEX if you're lucky. But anyway, you have to tell him how you feel to fix it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
oh I loved it Val, the only thing I didn't like, well, the ending seemed a little weak to me. Maybe it was just too abrupt, but I'm not sure. good piece here though! "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Sorry I am late on this one but as for your poem it held alot of meaning and emotion. I dont really know what to say about your situation other then what the others already have. I wish the best of luck with this if it is not already fixed. The law of harvest is to reap more than you sow.Sow a habit and you reap a character.Sow a character and you reap a destiny |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
I loved this, it's going straight in my library, I know what your saying and it's exactly what i'm looking for... on goes my quest. Thanx for sharing this great poem. Friendship may end in love but love in friendship never. |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
I like to think of this as the Mission Statement of all girls looking for a relationship. It is so true - simple yet nicely put. Great work  ~*Won't you come and hold my hand? This world has taken me as far as it can... without your smile.~* ~*If I never said I'm sorry, then I'm wrong, |
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