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Why I can't say those words
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Why I can't say those words |
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Starr Member
since 2001-02-08
Posts 100 |
This was meant for someone but I couldn't give it to him. Can I get some advice here? You told me you love me But I did not reply I didn't, no, couldn't begin to say why How could I say, It's not you, but he Believe me, I've been through so much We loved each other with each smile and each touch I was his earth and he, my sun And I said 'I love you' to only this one Some say what happened, there's a reason it must be Then can you tell me a reason for that tragedy In his dying strength knowing that at his side I couldn't be He wrote the last letter, from him, that I'll ever see The letter was sent on it's way And the day after I heard he died I cried, for I couldn't be at his side Later I got the letter signed M.J. I opened the blood stained letter at 'our place' And tears began to flow slowly down my face As I read it my tears began to race And I felt as though I was left in a big empty space Even in dying he thought of me How could God let this happen to us? Wasn't our love strong enough? I asked questions for answers there won’t be Joshua, I said 'I love you' to him and he died Because of this I'm afraid to say it again I'm sorry, but I don't want to give or get anymore pain I'm so afraid I don't think I can say those words now if I tried Every action of our lives touches some chord that will vibrate in eternity. |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
Wow, very powerful and emotional poem. Advice you want/need?? I can't say I know all, but it seems like you're hesitant because of your past. My best friend always reminds me that the past is for a reason, to be kept behind and for it not to creep up on you. So if this guy is truly someone you care about, and you feel the same way, then don't let the past prevent you from having a better future to come.  "You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Nice one here Starr. very emotional... I'm not very good with advise. I just found it interesting that the title of the poem is "why can't I say those words" and then you never gave these 'words' to the person you atended. I say this all the time, but I thin kit's SO true... I would much rather take a risk and get hurt then live with regret. But I understand your position, it's hard to move on, after something like this. I hope someday, somehow you will find the stregth. Jason |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely said here. These words were so sad and powerful. This one really hit me....such a wonderful poem here. My condolences about the one you loved. Let time heal.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
Very well written. I know how you feel. I've been there. I hope everything turned out OK in the end. Very nicely done poem. It's going stright to my library. *Jennifer "My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see." |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You've shown your emotions so well i feel bad that you have to go thru such hurt a loss of someone we care for is never easy hope things get better for you "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This is a very interesting poem. The rhyme scheme was played around with throughout. Gave the poem a very chaotic feel. As for the situation, hope you keep me posted on the latest news. Any advice I'll give you personally, not publically. I'm going to send this to page one so that you get a few more replies, and maybe some better insight. Plus it's just a good poem!  ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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