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Pit Stop |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
i wrote this because my bf goes to his friends every weekend to do "stuff" *L* and he stopped by my house for a little while before he went to his friends and this is how i feel. Pull in Pull out I am just a pit stop Along your way No need to stay long I’m not important Need to hurry out though Got to get to your friends So you can get wasted Luckily this is just weekends But it doesn’t matter You pull in You pull out So tell me How long am I gonna be Just a pit stop? *Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes* |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Hey, this be Bryan. Little spiteful are we? It's good, I tend to go for the longer ones though, but each style has it's merits. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i think you need to tell him how you feel about it communication --- remember that thanks for the share So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I'm sorry that you feel that way. At first i thought that he was being sweet....ya know? Stoppingover his womans house to see her before he does "stuff".....but then i got what the stuff was........BAD BOY! HE's a BAD BOY! nice poem  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
Written well... good emotion. Keep writing, and I hope things go better. "You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear |
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