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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada 
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today is bad poetry day....sorry Picking Poison A barbed tongue filled with a poisonous tonic, Kissing young men, nibbling their lips, their eyes glazed with passion soon to be glazed over with death A hypnotic rythm pulls them closer Sweet green eyes filled with temptation Then she strikes, placing heavenly kisses upon his lips, laughing at how gullable men can be Tugging at his lips she lets her poison tonic seep into his mouth His body shaking, in his mind he believes it's all passion, that his body is being swept away with soul-rendering kisses She on the other hand is thoroughly bored for his lips are not sweet and full but sour and thin, he's gone giggling, she pushes him to the ground he believes he died and went to heaven she wants him to burn away. he still believes he is alive and can kiss her again she waits to seduce the next man in line. Regina [This message has been edited by Ina (edited 02-05-2001).] |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
oooo Regina, I really like this one. When I read the first line you really had me hanging on for each line. Congratulations, not many people can do that.  Definately a library piece here. ~AF~ "Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment." Buddha |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This poem made me shudder with delight! I haven't done THAT in a long time! Ooh... i've got goosebumps. Among the top five on page one right now, in my opinion. Needless to say, this is library-bound for me as well. Magnificence. -Allan We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
*bounces up and down* I WANT MORE!!! I WANT MORE!!! This was so totally awsome  Kept me in total anticipation www.angelfire.com/wv2/poetrycorner I'm just a girl looking at a guy asking him to love me |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
wow!!! not only have you opened oness imagination, but also one's curiosity. This is a really great write. You should be proud of this one. Im at awe right now BRAVO!!! I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Ok I read this along with hearing classical music. Just as the poison entered his mouth the climax of the song arised and kept on going until he was pushed to the ground and then a serene violin part concluded....very nicely read by me hehe. I liked this.....I thought it was a very well written poem Regi....good job and keep them coming!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I just tried the classical music thing, and encourage you all to do the same! It really works! ^_^ |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
Im particulary a fan of classical music..but im open to new experiences. im glad u all liked it, in allhonestly im very shocked u do. regina for those who say I'm their friend, u know me not well for if u did u would not stay around anymore to watch me fall away. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This one was good for my imagination, I like how it's written And classical music can be very good, or very bad. Depends on what you're listening too! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com [This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 02-07-2001).] |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Silent movie-ish...yet sooo modern day...Amazing write here Regina. Keep em comin, keep em comin. ~Carly "Insane people are always sure that they are fine. It is only the sane people who are willing to admit that they are crazy." (Nora Ephron) |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Wow, incredible, dark images here...I could picture the whole scene...and the classical music idea fits very well with this. Well done!  *Krista Knutson* I'm a slow dying flower In a frost-killing hour The sweet turning sour and untouchable... -Natalie Merchant |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Oh, very nice!! I can just picture it... the evil in woman... it happens! Keep sharing!  xoxo Jenn "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I was just looking back on my library and saw this piece... thought it should be seen by a few more people. So here's a nifty little *bump* to page one.  Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
hehe i just found it lying around in the dust! I revitalized it... wow how did i miss it, its truely amazing! wondrous wonderful job! JR When my life dims to a perish, it will become a quote in itself... |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
i coulda swore i replied to this earlier..must not have! but i know i liked it Sorry it took so long..great job*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
Allan....thanks for "bumping" it. You already know that though. Thank you for the new replies. Regina |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I know I've replied to this already, but Regina...omg, this poem deserves to be up there again  "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
WOW!!! How did I miss this the first time around? This is simply beautiful! *click* into my library! I loved it! *Jennifer "My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see." |
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coalesce New Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 9canada |
wonderful poem, the theme was exelent and i'm excited to read more of your work. excelent peom |
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