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chasing rain
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0 posted 2001-06-13 09:20 PM


I feel the presence
Of someone or something here
Within the shadows.
I look to my side
Only to find an angel,
With wings unfolded
As they shelter me
With soft light that shines through their
Breathless, feathered wings.
He whispers to me
In a soft, sweet lulling voice
Trusting I will hear.
I hear the silence
The wind that whispers softly
Is nothing at all.

Nothing.


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Just experimenting with Haikus...for something different.  

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ethel lahootie
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1 posted 2001-06-13 10:38 PM


i really like this...im not into formats and all but i liked how thi was and the story that goes w/it...good job -ethel

anonymous albert ?
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2 posted 2001-06-13 11:29 PM


im started to really liekd these haikus of yours...beautiful job!...hope to see more...bye Leah

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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3 posted 2001-06-14 02:05 AM


.........soft.........
fearing-laughter
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4 posted 2001-06-14 02:50 AM


kool! i liked this...very pretty.   you did a great job of painting a picture with your poem :-) great job! yaaaay! LoL.  later
-fear-

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5 posted 2001-06-16 03:10 AM


Haiku is about nature...is this?
Well I liked this nonetheless. The haiku was great!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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6 posted 2001-06-16 11:58 AM


good job Leah
you're really talented
keep it up

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Mic

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