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jytree
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0 posted 2001-01-27 11:40 PM


Kissign her lips and holding her tight,
Wipeing the from her eye and make thing feel right,
Hush my dear don't say a word,
I will love you past first second and third,
So here we at my home,
Darkness falls and were alone,

I attept to kiss yu on the lips,
But sunddly you grab my and take me for a trip,
So now I wake up with a flower pot on my head,
Thanking the stars that I'm not dead,

Walking into the house holding my head,
I turn to look to see her on my bed,
I step back fearing for my life,
Trying to remember what heppened last night,

Going to bathroom taking some drugs,
I notice that she is awake standing on my bear skin rug,
She walk up to me and kisses me tight,
And I think Alright,

Leave alone that day and night,
I search for the truth was what was right,



© Copyright 2001 Michael Jay vaughn - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-01-28 12:32 PM


This was a nice one. Some of it kinda went around me, but I grasped most of it.
Good one here



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

jytree
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2 posted 2001-01-28 03:59 AM


I do agree it is out there some where,
Whaaat happened is whEN I was wrtting it my brain stoped

Lead me not into temptation,
I can find the way there mysel



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3 posted 2001-01-28 07:30 AM


Nice writing here Jytree. Although my mind isn't really in full on focus mode at the moment, I am pretty sure I grasped the concept.

Excellent from what I could see.  

~AF~

"Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment."
Buddha

katherine
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4 posted 2001-01-28 07:37 AM


this is weird. But it's good!
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5 posted 2001-01-28 09:39 AM


I'm afraid I have to just say.... "huh??"
I am totally losing you on this....
Is this a true story? Enlighten me.

xoxo
Jenn


"A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ??


jytree
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6 posted 2001-01-28 09:04 PM


I am sorry this one is out there some where I think I was asleep when this happened
so I am sorry


Lead me not into temptation,
I can find the way there mysel



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7 posted 2001-01-29 01:32 PM


actually i thought it was good
i thought it was kinda metaphoric
i saw it this was.....
"even when we're nice to some people, they end up still treating us bad, the at some point they act like everything is ok. Even after hurting us."
well, that's my take on it

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



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