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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
i don't know where i got the idea for this poem it just seemed to flow. Screaming Screaming out in pain. I don't knw what to do. You keep on screaming out my name. You and me we've been through worse. I guess this time you finally cracked. What to do about it i don't know. I hate to see you in such agony, but i don't know what to do. I miss you, the old you. The you that was kind but strong. Now you are but a mere shadow of yourself. We used to be so good together you and me. We'd stamp out the trouble together. That was until i got to weak to fight. After that you'd fight all alone, while i lent on you for surport. But in time you lost your strengh. I guess we both knew it was enevitable. Day by day you grew weaker. Each fight became harder for you to handle. But you still kept on fighting. Fighting for the both of us. But that last fight wiped you out. It didn't last long, you were to weak. It wasn't your fault, believe me i don't blame you. You did your best. I knew it wouldn't last. I knew you couldn't survive. When you colapsed i was afraid you were dead. I started to make my way over to you. Then i heard it. It was like nothing i'd ever heard before. It took me a while to realise that it was coming from you. You were screaming out in pain. You've been screaming ever since. |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey wow this was really good. The little story was well thought out and written. Congrats on this one. A wonderful job on it!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
this WAS a great story!...i love the technique you write in..origianl and delightful..great work "When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro" |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
this was absolutely great. i love the passion that came out in it. i wish i could write like this. wonderful job. Valerie *...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Katherine, this is fantastic. There is nothing like writing on emotions and you have done it here. Bravo to you. ~AF~ "Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment." Buddha |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
most amazing read Katherine. You're a good narator of your story. thanks for the beautiful read. I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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