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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
The winterchild's night Sings sweetly at the moon And I lay silently sleeping With my eyes open too soon. Too soon towards The rising sun. While the stars vanish One by one. The light bounces off The iris in my eye And the first tendrils of light Fall from the sky. Like fallen angels With wings made of mist I could see the souls The spirits had kissed. This seeming sight Sends chills up my spine I know this glimpse's Not meant to be mine. What is to be mine Is the thought of my theft And what life would be like Once the light left. Once the light left I felt no more pain As I slept soundly While outside it rained. I never even knew My life was suddenly done They took my soul To the setting sun. As the sun set In saffron and plum I knew my life Was indeed done. I did not mind For I was with light With delight I cried out As I took flight. "If I find in myself desires which nothing in this world can satisfy, the only logical explanation is that i was made for another world." |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
wow!!...beautiful poem leah!...this was amazingly well written...i really liekd this whole poem...awesome job here  ...hope to see more...  ...?ahhhhh....i'm addicted to passions in poetry!!!!! [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-26-2001).] |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
wow...dude this was *bad word* great!!!! i mean that. i'm just...wow! great poem! thanks for sharing leah. i look forward to reading your other posts. -fear- |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
this will probably be my last poem i'm posting... for the rest of the week (maybe month). I feel there is still much to be learned...plus there's exams!  "If I find in myself desires which nothing in this world can satisfy, the only logical explanation is that i was made for another world." |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This one is written very well, it read smoothly for me and was really good. Nice job "Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This one was well done. I liked it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
This is really beautiful. I loved your images of the sun. "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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XFalloutX Junior Member
since 2001-05-13
Posts 31NC |
Leah Leah Leah....what you got couped up in that head of yours...lol....good job on this one. :P "Evil I tell you EVIL!!!!" "Oh this one is a keeper" hehe... "should I smile because we are friends or cry because thats all will ever be?" |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
that was really great!! oh, and I love your constructive critiques thing...that's cute... but 2 pennies isn't a lot... lol, anyway, I love the poem...hope to read more soon!! *s* Stace |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
~*stands up and applauds*~ This is perfect keep em coming I'm so sorry for doubting you Kit ... please forgive me!!!! |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
You've expressed yourself well here. It was very nicely written. ~AF~ Know what you want. Become your real self. |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great poem Leah well done I really enjoyed the read. Err good luck with the exams and all... hope you get back to posting soon. Zu |
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